Mesalia Forums

In Game Name (IGN
TheHustle (Currently, you never know when I may change it!)
How did you find us?
Zarkaylia, posted about your server on a thread of mine on the minecraft forums.
About You:
I have roleplayed extensively, my minecraft career has been wrought with break due to personal life matters. (College, Family, Work, Having a son.) But, I return geared up to start my next great saga, whatever that may be!
Name:
Leo "The Bull" Rancher
Age:
45
Gender:
Male
Appearance:
Approximately 6' 2" broad at the shoulder narrow at the hips with larger calves. His body is tanned from the sun, though his naturally light complexion keeps him from being exceptionally dark. His upper body is scarred from labor and battles. His knuckles are exceptionally rough in comparison, calloused and scarred from repeated damage. His hair is dark, but frays of gray show from the sides.
Personality:
Leo is firstly ambitious, and determined to make a name for himself in this new "free" life he has come to know. His youthful nature of curiosity and compassion has been tarnished by a life of pain and sorrow. He is gentle when left to his own devices or around people he is comfortable with, he can be methodical and calculating in achieving his goals, yet the screams of the past can over take him when he is threatened sending him into blinding rage losing sight of his dreams and his loves. A great guest at your party, so long as you don't spill your drink on him.
Backstory:
Leo has just truly begun to understand his new life as a free mesalian, his mother and father were both slaves to the Xitian, his master was a lower noble who's acreage bore no strategic use nor any great riches. His father was a indentured farmer with some level of autonomy at the time and his mother a house maid. They bore Leo and began to dream of freedom... a deadly dream. Their plans ended before they truly began and Leo was stripped from his mother arms as he watched her and his father executed. Leo was then at a young age given the yoke of his father's work with the accompanying punishments of being the son of runaways. He tilled the land and tended to the herd until the day that he was given a new and all the more demoralizing punishment. Being larger than most of the other Mesalian children his master thought it might be amusing to pit him against another for amusement.

Something changed that day, Leo being a kind heart didn't want to fight, but it soon became apparent he didn't have much choice. A few unanswered blows in something dark took hold of him, years of punishment became blood-boiling strength and the lights in his mind darkened. When he awoke his fists were cracked and sore, he was breathing heavily... And his master was praising his new pet. Leo looked down at the bloodly mess that was once a Mesalians and fell to his knees. From then on, week after week after the stores were tallied and the slaves put to their quarters Leo would break a new challenger. Soon the other Mesalians began to avoid him and whisper behind his back, he continued his toil in the fields plotting for his day.

Finally one day, just as his parents before him Leo broke from the fields in a mad dash, he cleared the fence line barely and rushed into the trees. Leo had explored the woods as a child, but he was smaller then, branches from shorter trees battered his face and he staggered and stumbled not realizing the river bank was just before him. He fell into the river and was fairly quickly fished out by his master's guards. Unlike his parents however, Leo was of more entertaining use. He would have to fight while still in his shackles and he continued win, strangling the life from his opponents with his chains. However unlike the other prisoners he never asked for the chains to be loosened or removed... He had a plan, every battle he would drench them in blood, ever night he would place a few drops of water on them... His plan was perfect until the Lucins finally arrived, the castle went up in smoke quickly and the rest of the Mesalians shuffled off with their Lucin liberators... Leo rather idiotically thought the Xitian tales of how the Lucins were even more evil might be true; So instead he snapped his rusty chains using the bars of his cell for leverage and made quick his escape out the window... Into the same wilderness that whipped him the last time.

The first years of his freedom were slow, he feared venturing into towns or villages for fear that the Xitians still ruled with an iron fist. He grew simple herbs and roamed the forests a free, but wild man. He tried his hand at hunting, but his sole kill was a small rabbit who's blood drove him into a frenzy of fear and remorse. Weeks turned to months and in turn to years, over time he began to venture closer to civilization, rarely venturing into the center of town, usually only scavenging through back alley-ways under cover of night. Slowly however he realized he did not see Xitians, only Mesthalians and blue-eyed Lucins. One day he met a small child in a back alley way lost and scared, mostly of Leo and Leo too was scared of the child. After they exchange fearful looks they began to conversate. Leo shepherded the child home safely and the boy's mother and father fed him. For sometime things were calm and life was good, but the sins of the past followed Leo to his new corner of the world as former slaves began to recognize Leo as the former slave who murdered for his master's amusement. His adoptive family bought him passage fearing for his life upon a trade ship bound for the Forbidden Lands.

Leo enjoyed the salty winds and the sea blue as the eye could see, atleast until a storm hit and the vessel sank just off the coast. Leo not knowing how to swim clung to a barrel of barely and the tide took him ashore. He collapsed on the beach from exhaustion and water exposure, when he awoke he felt the sting of the sun and just as years before he fled into the forest seeking shelter.

Capabilities:
Novice - Lumbering
Advanced - Martial Arts
Advanced - Farming
Competent - Survival
Items:
Broken Shackles
Pants
Barrel Of Wheat
Additional Comments:
I don't make reference to the civil war because he wasn't out in the world or aware of it at that time.

Hello, Leaf here to grade your application.


"long after the return of the Lucins": Considering Leo is just about 30, he would've been born approximately 15 years after The Purges, where Lucins came through and liberated the Middle Realm from the Xitians. I'd like you to put in the backstory how this particular band of Xitians managed to stay on top of things, and evaded having justice dealt out to them for so long, as the Purge was quite widespread.

Skills: As of now, your character has too many skills for his age. Also, please note that an expert skill takes roughly 15 years of study and 15 years of experience to develop, and only if the character's been devoting all his time in that particular field. I'd say taking a look at our skill guide, and perhaps ironing your skills out a bit. I would suggest taking down the expert skills down, and giving him maybe one advanced, and one competent, and knocking the husbandry out and bunging it together with farming. Oh and you can take Deception off the list; it's more of an RP skill, something that more depends on the player's RP to manifest.

Ending: And lastly, your backstory needs to end with your character making his way to the setting, namely the Forbidden Lands.


That's it for now, please bump the thread once you're done.

Bump for retry

Well, that seems like a clean edit, well done. I call this APPROVED. I'll pm you the server ip.