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Application - JackdawGrey - JackdawGrey - 25-12-2015

In Game Name (IGN):
JackdawGrey

How did you find us? (Forums, friend, previous member, etc…)
Heh.

About You:
Well you know me up until about eighteen. I spent some time working on myself and trying to figure my life out, then at nineteen I joined the Army National Guard. I spent three and a half months at Fort Benning, Infantry School, and then I came home and got assigned the M240 Machine gun and.. Well, that's a bunch of dull military mumbo jumbo. Basically, after my problems hit their climax I took the time to grow up, and now that it's done I'd like to make my return.
CHARACTER INFORMATION

Name:
Solomon Mahdi Sabir

Age:
26

Gender:
Male

Appearance:
Solomon stands at roughly five foot eleven with dark tan skin and curly black hair. He has deep green eyes that seem to be constantly slightly squinted against the sun and a thick unkept brow. His jaw is square and his lips are full but rough, his teeth clean and white but not without a chip or two. The man has broad laborers shoulders and the build of someone who eats well and does regular exercise on top of hard labor, he cares for his body. It's the only one he has. He keeps a well kept but purposely slightly scruffy beard and seems to have rather thick hair every place where hair likes to be from chest to arms to feet.

Personality:
Solomon normally is a rather quiet man, but that isn't to say he is shy. He might be simple minded and uneducated, but that doesn't mean he isn't sharp. His words are deliberate and thoughtful, and he tends to keep to-the-point. Though he can at times be rather rowdy, he tends to restrain himself as needed and keep in relatively good order. He knows when to keep down, and when to throw down. That being said, he is also known for easily falling into various temptations and not having a great degree of discipline in numerous areas. Though he cares deeply about his own wellbeing and health, enough so to keep his words thoughtful and his actions deliberate.. He can be rather easily pursuaded into destructive behavior if played right.

Backstory:

Capabilities:
Lumberjacking - Advanced:
Solomon has spent a large portion of his life doing this for a living, and was raised in this trade by his family. He fells the trees, carves the trees, and can even do some basic woodwork. Structures are easy enough, just never ask him to make furniture or complicated architecture.

Firefighting - Competent:
Solomon has been doing this on a part time basis his entire adult life, and has a fair bit of recent experience. He knows how to direct a team to limit and extinguish fires, as well as how to prevent them being able to spread in the first place.

Gardening - Apprentice:
This has been a rather involved hobby of his for a few years now. He knows how to plant and raise trees, tend flowers. All the basics. Don't ask him to breed a new species or cultivate plants out of their natural environment. He isn't the man to go to for identifying and extracting herbs. Planting local greenery and raising it is pretty much his limit.

Fighting - Novice:
He's a big guy, and he gets into a fair number of brawls. That being said, he has a degree of natural skill. He can throw a good punch and take a few hits. He has a good pain tolerance. He knows how to weild a felling axe as a make-do weapon in a tight spot. But the upper limit of his skill is really bare knuckle bar fights and the occassional dusk encounter while out felling trees.


RE: [NEW] Application - JackdawGrey - Hutchy - 28-12-2015

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  • In his teenage years’ There’s not a lot of mention of Sabir before now. Since this is a backstory, you should ideally focus on him rather than joining him quite late on. The backstory should explain what he, specifically, was like as a child, then into adolescence, then adulthood.
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  • Finally, the backstory needs to conclude with the character’s arrival in the Forbidden Lands.

That's all I caught this time round. Bump the thread when you're done, and we'll continue.
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RE: [NEW] Application - JackdawGrey - JackdawGrey - 29-12-2015

Edited, thank you. Will excuse and forget the little mix up about lore.


RE: [NEW] Application - JackdawGrey - Hutchy - 29-12-2015

Don't you sass me, boy. Next round.

I still need to see some more description of his childhood here, currently there's not a whole lot we can gather where it stands now. If you're stuck for inspiration, describing his then personality or what he did aside from sticking to his older siblings like a limpet to a rock. It'll give us more of an insight into the character and fill in a relatively barren part of his backstory.

If you can't think of anything to do on this front, additional detail about his early teens can help fill in the gap. When he decided on his job and how he was trained, how quickly he picked it up, or didn't... I leave that up to you, but that early part of his backstory needs more detail.

That's all this time. Bump when you're done and we'll continue from there.


RE: [Pending] Application - JackdawGrey - JackdawGrey - 30-12-2015

Added another paragraph, then another sentence in the beginning of another paragraph.

Replaced all mentions of the word "gypsy"