[The Botmon]

In Game Name (IGN):
TheTechnoblade27
How did you find us? (Forums, friend, previous member, etc…)
I was looking for a rpg server and found this
About You:
Im 15 so i still go to school.
I live in the netherlands.
My hobbys are gaming and making music.
I like batman

CHARACTER INFORMATION

Name:
Vivec (or Vehk)
Age:
23
Gender:
Male
Appearance:
Dark grey/blue skin, Red eyes.
Not tall but very muscular.
Personality:
He is a nice guy, but gets aggresive really fast.
he doesn't trust people beacause he never really had real friends.
He can handly pain good beacause of him being a slave and them hitting him for working not hard enough.
Backstory:
In the veld war some mesallians were taken to the dusk realm by the xitians to be held as slaves. Including his parents.
He was born in the dusk realm (22 AV). His parents were murdered when he was 10 years old by the xitians.
He was born in the dusk realm, beacause of that he didn't look normal. His whole life he was busy mining ores and smelted weapons for the xitians.
In the last 5 years there was a guy that learned him how to fight and sneak, hoping for a change to escape.
But that changed when the dragons came. 5 years after the appearance of the dragons the city were he was kept as a slave got attacked.
He saw his change and took a weapons and some ores and escaped alone (40 AV). The next 5 years he was wandering through the dusk realm trying to find a way back to the middle realm.
When he encountered a xitian he killed them and when he saw a dragon he was hiding.
After the 5 years he finnaly found a way back and went for the first time to the middle realm (45 AV).

Capabilities:
Mining and smelting: Expert, Beacause he did that his whole life.
Sneaking: Average beacause in the last 5 years of him being a slave he got training from a guy.
Meelee (Sword): Adept, beacause in the last 5 years of him being a slave he got trained and when he was wandering through the dusk realm he fought much.
He knows much about the culture of the xitians.

Items:
A xitian sword and some ores and coal.

Additional Comments:
My skin is now not how he looks like but i will change it if i get accepted.

[Hutchy]

Hello, Botmon. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this character fits into the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on her home, her family? Does her family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Please elaborate on this.

Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over his life. The backstory needs to show more description of how he was as a child, how he was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this. In addition, we ask that a paragraph describing the character’s personality be added to help us judge it’s realism. If you’re having trouble writing this, the Character Sheets forum is a good place to start.

Your character’s appearance needs some work. Mesalians are basically humans, so won't have blue/grey skin or red eyes. Since you are new here, I'm afraid you're restricted to playing a Mesalian.
 
Now for the main problem for this round: Mesalians cannot survive prolonged periods in either the Dusk or Celestial Realma, a few hours at most. This has to change to be the Middle Realm before we continue.

That's all for now. Post again in this thread when you've made your edits and we'll continue.

[Hutchy]

Trashed due to inactivity. Feel free to re-apply.