28-03-2013, 08:49 AM
I made a couple small (but still very important) edits in the application.
First one is that he is perceptive. I realized that he would have gained a higher sort of "sense" of people and his surroundings since he became a merchant, so to cater and "advertise" specific things based off of the things he notices in some people's mannerisms, clothing, etc.
The second one is really a consistency error. It's in the background story itself where he hid in the barrel to escape the commotion and hopefully not get caught by the thugs. Originally I had implied (rather poorly) that he disassociated himself from the situation, but I realized that wasn't likely good enough.
Sorry for the inconvenience in case anyone was in the process of reviewing this.
First one is that he is perceptive. I realized that he would have gained a higher sort of "sense" of people and his surroundings since he became a merchant, so to cater and "advertise" specific things based off of the things he notices in some people's mannerisms, clothing, etc.
The second one is really a consistency error. It's in the background story itself where he hid in the barrel to escape the commotion and hopefully not get caught by the thugs. Originally I had implied (rather poorly) that he disassociated himself from the situation, but I realized that wasn't likely good enough.
Sorry for the inconvenience in case anyone was in the process of reviewing this.