30-01-2014, 06:48 PM
I've edited it to include all the same things I wrote in the replies in the main post, so that it is easier to read.
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Michelle
Head Cheerleader, Homecoming Queen, Part-Time Model
Head Cheerleader, Homecoming Queen, Part-Time Model
Hi, Riv. Sorry for the wait; I had a few commitments today, namely Lunar New Year.
Anyway, your feedback:
1. “the seed of a warrior spirit Zarkaylia and Thomas planted” Please discuss this with Zark and Fire to ensure this is accurately supported by RP events, then revise accordingly.
2. Too many items. I recommend removing the pigments, as they’re the most unsupported by the return story. Please revise.
3. “Hair Color: Amber Red (Red) (Wavy-Curly) (Waist Length) … Skin Tone: Rosy Fair, Lightly Freckled” These don’t reflect the changes to your character. Please revise.
That’s all, for now. If anything’s unclear, feel free to ask questions. Good luck.
Anyway, your feedback:
1. “the seed of a warrior spirit Zarkaylia and Thomas planted” Please discuss this with Zark and Fire to ensure this is accurately supported by RP events, then revise accordingly.
2. Too many items. I recommend removing the pigments, as they’re the most unsupported by the return story. Please revise.
3. “Hair Color: Amber Red (Red) (Wavy-Curly) (Waist Length) … Skin Tone: Rosy Fair, Lightly Freckled” These don’t reflect the changes to your character. Please revise.
That’s all, for now. If anything’s unclear, feel free to ask questions. Good luck.
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Michelle
Head Cheerleader, Homecoming Queen, Part-Time Model
Head Cheerleader, Homecoming Queen, Part-Time Model
Well, it's a somewhat flimsy personality change; probably too dramatic for the amount of time that Liz has been gone. I personally don't think making the character more combat-oriented will solve the previous issues you've had with this character. But, if you think it will and would like to at least give it a go, then I'll approve.
Just one thing to note, however: if you wish to make any skill updates for your character, you must apply for them, and then have them approved by staff. I say this because it seems Liz will be learning more about combat.
Where do you want me to move this?
Just one thing to note, however: if you wish to make any skill updates for your character, you must apply for them, and then have them approved by staff. I say this because it seems Liz will be learning more about combat.
Where do you want me to move this?
31-01-2014, 04:59 PM
Well, Liz already had the combat skill in archery, she just didn't have the will to use it. Her entire time training with Sidian was for her spirit, no skills gained. I guess just move this to archive and move her character sheet back so I can fix it, please?