[Hutchy]

Right, I think we're almost there, just one last thing needs addressing.

• ‘but he did join the town guard’ Considering he has something of a reputation at this point, like before, we need an explanation why the guard were willing to let him join.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.

[LuckyLeaf]

Bump. People in that town simply did not know of his reputation, and he was rather skillful with his sword.

[Hutchy]

Alright, Young, I think we're all set here.

Accepted.