18-08-2013, 12:46 AM
Here we go again. Sorry for the wait, I had to get some more input.
Quote: His skin is very pale except near the bottom of his face where its slightly tan.
Are you implying half his face is tanned? That just isn’t realistic, please revise.
- Skills
Given the backstory, it's likely the character may be capable of a combat skill, something that correlates to what he's got already. Generally it isn't possible to survive the wilderness without some way to defend against duskspawn (IG Mobs) and wild animals. Staff combat may work given mention of the walking stick in the backstory, or archery. Something along those lines. Most characters have a job skill that gives them a career in the setting, this may mean the ability to hunt as part of Airwalks survival training. Make sure to edit the backstory to mention him learning said skill, and keep the skill guide in mind as far as skill level goes.
- Lore Relation
Your lore relation still needs work. The Civil wars have raged all across the mainlands for most this character's life. It would effect him and the neighboring towns more than just becoming relevant when he turns 18. Include mention of the ongoing hostilities in the area; maybe the port town had a number of skirmishes before it was finally sacked, or perhaps they had another way of keeping out of the war, please revise. Also, for convenience's sake, please name the port town.