18-08-2013, 07:52 PM
Hey Tech, me again.
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I would change this to the Lucins spewing water or wind, or water Lucins creating ice shards. Large waves are a bit of a stretch. Take a look at the powers guide. Lucin and Xitians are not exactly strong enough with their powers to create storms or floods. Just try to ground their powers a little. Xitians and Lucins are not as strong as one may think.
2. History skill- I suggest you take this down a notch. More than likely enslavement onwards. Nobody really knows anything that far back. Historical records would be slightly before the war, and most was lost. So I suggest bringing down his knowledge quite a bit.
3. Skills - Separation of hunting and combat. - I'd take one or the other. Or both relatively low. Hunting and melee combat are not the same. The short sword is not a good hunting weapon.
4. Science skill - Please go into a specific field. It seems that you are mostly into physics with this, but stick to that preferably.
I apologies for the added things. I'm just trying to take this in easier blocks for you to handle.
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Quote:- Removed the ability of Lucins to cast storms, changed it to waves of water
I would change this to the Lucins spewing water or wind, or water Lucins creating ice shards. Large waves are a bit of a stretch. Take a look at the powers guide. Lucin and Xitians are not exactly strong enough with their powers to create storms or floods. Just try to ground their powers a little. Xitians and Lucins are not as strong as one may think.
2. History skill- I suggest you take this down a notch. More than likely enslavement onwards. Nobody really knows anything that far back. Historical records would be slightly before the war, and most was lost. So I suggest bringing down his knowledge quite a bit.
3. Skills - Separation of hunting and combat. - I'd take one or the other. Or both relatively low. Hunting and melee combat are not the same. The short sword is not a good hunting weapon.
4. Science skill - Please go into a specific field. It seems that you are mostly into physics with this, but stick to that preferably.
I apologies for the added things. I'm just trying to take this in easier blocks for you to handle.