11-10-2013, 04:44 PM
Hey Fae. Sorry this has taken a long while, but thanks for not bringing it up a lot in staff chat. Your patience is super-appreciated on this end. Also sorry if anything’s not particularly clear right now; I am having someone else ‘check myself before I wreck myself’, but I have a heavy fever, and I believe my brain is trying to break through my eardrums and make a run for it.
1. ‘The clan was hardest hit, however, when the Xitians had decided to take away most of everything they had, including their best animals and their children and families.’ This is very vague lore relation; it is unclear what lore event it is referring to, or even which time frame this section of backstory occurs in. Please clarify/elaborate.
2. ‘(I'm going to leave the rest out for roleplay fun and spoilers.)’ Everything needs to be reviewed and approved. Please PM me with details on this information, and it will be dealt with from there.
3. Your character’s skill levels need some minor revision. The skill system here is complicated enough; specifics such as ‘Novice/+’ are not necessary and seem difficult to understand. With the animal health care skill, I personally would choose apprentice, as three competent skills at twenty-three (though they are closely linked) is pushing it. Please revise and/or clarify.
4. As you already know, the rules of Mesalia currently state only one pet is allowed per character. Yes, I am aware of the rule revision that might possibly change this, but it hasn’t been passed, and I’m under the impression you didn’t want to wait. Considering your character’s profession however, the other staff will be voting on this, though personally I would like to see some justification; why two dogs instead of one? Why should this rule be bent for this character? Please provide some justification.
5. Jelle and Jos themselves require more description. So far, they’re basically listed as objects (which could be how Heidi views them, but that’s only speculation without facts). I would like to see some detail on what they’re like, how they are around people, how they are around Heidi, etc. Please elaborate/revise.
That’s all. Good luck, and feel free to ask questions if in the event that I have typed gibberish.
1. ‘The clan was hardest hit, however, when the Xitians had decided to take away most of everything they had, including their best animals and their children and families.’ This is very vague lore relation; it is unclear what lore event it is referring to, or even which time frame this section of backstory occurs in. Please clarify/elaborate.
2. ‘(I'm going to leave the rest out for roleplay fun and spoilers.)’ Everything needs to be reviewed and approved. Please PM me with details on this information, and it will be dealt with from there.
3. Your character’s skill levels need some minor revision. The skill system here is complicated enough; specifics such as ‘Novice/+’ are not necessary and seem difficult to understand. With the animal health care skill, I personally would choose apprentice, as three competent skills at twenty-three (though they are closely linked) is pushing it. Please revise and/or clarify.
4. As you already know, the rules of Mesalia currently state only one pet is allowed per character. Yes, I am aware of the rule revision that might possibly change this, but it hasn’t been passed, and I’m under the impression you didn’t want to wait. Considering your character’s profession however, the other staff will be voting on this, though personally I would like to see some justification; why two dogs instead of one? Why should this rule be bent for this character? Please provide some justification.
5. Jelle and Jos themselves require more description. So far, they’re basically listed as objects (which could be how Heidi views them, but that’s only speculation without facts). I would like to see some detail on what they’re like, how they are around people, how they are around Heidi, etc. Please elaborate/revise.
That’s all. Good luck, and feel free to ask questions if in the event that I have typed gibberish.
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