[Michelle]

Right. Sorry for the delayed response. I had a lot of uni things, and then I had to get the staff to discuss the dog thing. Anyway.

1. Personality issues: after giving this a second look, I believe that the character's personality description should be improved. Please follow the instructions below.

• a) ~ Eccentric ~ She has a few eccentric habits, such as talking to the animals as if they were intelligent and able to talk back to her. She is also obsessive about some things, such as the colors blue (her favorite) and red (unable to stand red), about things being kept clean (dirt is fine but dust is not), and things in straight lines. This does not seem to be justified by the character's backstory. As a result, they read as quirks for the sake of quirks, as opposed to something that adds to the character's depth. Please revise/clarify.
  b) Currently, the description is too list-like. Please provide a prose description that goes with what you already have, or that replaces what you already have.
  c) Overall, the personality description requires more detail. This relates slightly to the previous point (as lists tend to oversimplify complexity), but Heidi feels a little too archetypal; she needs something to set her apart from the general 'frail, quiet girl'. I understand this is probably what you were aiming for with her eccentricities, but you need to explain them more clearly. Please elaborate/revise.

2. The dog issue. We'll get to that later, but I believe right now the idea is to open up the issue on the forums so it can be discussed by all.

That's all for now. Good luck, and let me know if you have any questions.