Alright Stezzo. I'm taking over the grading of your application.
Appearance:
1) This might be nitpicking on your choice of words but if you're having me confused you're having me confused.
Above part about wrestling with animals or dusks I take literally and I must point out that some of the dusk creatures require some quite severe damage to be caused to them to go down. And as we have a character in the setting that's very good at hand combat and still struggle with the more walking-dead ones I'm going to have to ask you to reconsider how he'd be actually wrestling them with a novice skill in hand combat or that you rephrase. At least as a considerate thing to do towards those in the setting with chars with better skill.
Skills:
1) Firstly I'm going to ask you to remove all your arguments for the skills. If there is justification needed for your char's skills they are to be put in the background story.
2) By reading the story and researching newly accepted applications like Bandit's I come to same conclusion as the rest of the staff in regards of having 4 competent skills. I'd suggest that like was done with Bandit's skill with her spear, you knock down the archery skill one level.
3) I'd like to see the bola, knife combat and hand combat more properly justified within the story itself. Especially the bola came as a surprise to me (I read the story before I read the skills).
Remember that the skill guide is partly created to balance realism and fairness.
Story
1) You mention in your notes that he has no opinions on Xitians or Lucins cause he has no way to judge them, but what about the Prologue?
2) The Travel and Mutiny parts confuse me. Where'd he get the idea to travel? Why then? What do their parents think of it? Etc. Please elaborate so it's easier to understand what goes on and why in these sections.
3) There's a big difference between dusks and humans, I have to point this out. I'm not entirely certain in which way you mean he doesn't think of it any different from humans though, please explain.
Items
1) I'd approve all but the arrows. They're highly likely to be lost in the sea.
Notes:
1) How does the children react to how they're treated by their peers? There's no mention of this.
2) I'm not going to question that he survived, that is plausible, but I'm going to question that he'd be able to easily take on a bunch of sailors in their own element. Firstly he's never fought on a ship and secondly he's never fought humans. Dusks are savage barely intelligent beings that does not fight with skill even when they wield weapons.
Appearance:
1) This might be nitpicking on your choice of words but if you're having me confused you're having me confused.
Quote:wrestling with both animal and dusk creature
Above part about wrestling with animals or dusks I take literally and I must point out that some of the dusk creatures require some quite severe damage to be caused to them to go down. And as we have a character in the setting that's very good at hand combat and still struggle with the more walking-dead ones I'm going to have to ask you to reconsider how he'd be actually wrestling them with a novice skill in hand combat or that you rephrase. At least as a considerate thing to do towards those in the setting with chars with better skill.
Skills:
1) Firstly I'm going to ask you to remove all your arguments for the skills. If there is justification needed for your char's skills they are to be put in the background story.
2) By reading the story and researching newly accepted applications like Bandit's I come to same conclusion as the rest of the staff in regards of having 4 competent skills. I'd suggest that like was done with Bandit's skill with her spear, you knock down the archery skill one level.
3) I'd like to see the bola, knife combat and hand combat more properly justified within the story itself. Especially the bola came as a surprise to me (I read the story before I read the skills).
Remember that the skill guide is partly created to balance realism and fairness.
Story
1) You mention in your notes that he has no opinions on Xitians or Lucins cause he has no way to judge them, but what about the Prologue?
2) The Travel and Mutiny parts confuse me. Where'd he get the idea to travel? Why then? What do their parents think of it? Etc. Please elaborate so it's easier to understand what goes on and why in these sections.
3) There's a big difference between dusks and humans, I have to point this out. I'm not entirely certain in which way you mean he doesn't think of it any different from humans though, please explain.
Items
1) I'd approve all but the arrows. They're highly likely to be lost in the sea.
Notes:
1) How does the children react to how they're treated by their peers? There's no mention of this.
2) I'm not going to question that he survived, that is plausible, but I'm going to question that he'd be able to easily take on a bunch of sailors in their own element. Firstly he's never fought on a ship and secondly he's never fought humans. Dusks are savage barely intelligent beings that does not fight with skill even when they wield weapons.