[FireDog]

You're making good progress Demo. You got the skills as to something that I feel fit for Mesalia. Now on to the next part.

Backstory:

She was trained to do many different things that leaked into many different skill sets of many different professions, though never really understood much beyond that in most of them. These things were things such as black smithing nails, knives, and other common and simple tools, cooking food so that it's edible, sewing, and so on and so forth. Every person in the nomadic group would grow to be very versatile and know how to do many things, but be good at very few of them, by the age of twenty, and so she did.

The story states specific things learned although only once. Please revise it to show some training and growth of the skills over time.

Nekhii was a very quiet girl throughout her entire life

Your story does little to show the progression of your characters personality throughout her life. The way you have it now, your character remains the same. Over time, people change and learn naturally. Nobody remains the same. Please revise as to what she was like as a kid through adulthood.

This would have confused her greatly, since they never wasted a single morsel of the food she brought them, nor the occasional clothing or blankets she patched together haphazardly with her limited knowledge. She even went so far as to chew the food for some of the more broken people. Those who had lost their teeth, or were otherwise incapable of eating it properly without assistance.

Just why did the elders punish her for taking care of people who seem to be wounded or sick? She's confused as to why, but you should really say so. Otherwise, it comes off as a contraction. Note, you may want to remove this since taking care of others was removed as a skill.

When she was sixteen she found that she had started to become more womanly in figure. This attracted men and boys alike who would want to woo her. She was overwhelmed with it all. By the time she was twenty she had "made love" with six different men, each one essentially using her and wearing away her tolerance for men in general. After the sixth man stopped associating himself with her, she was distraught. In their group it wasn't unusual for women and men alike to be prolific. It wasn't even frowned upon. Sex was recognized as a normal thing. No religion told them otherwise. However, she wasn't looking for sex with those men. She was hoping for something more, and each of them betrayed her trust.

Why would she continue to go after men and have sex with the men if she's just been betrayed of what she wanted before? If she doesn't want sex, but a full relationship, why would she continue to have sex? Wouldn't she stop before anything went down if that's not what she wants? Please revise.

One day she could be cooking, while the next she'd be in the smithy forging simple things such as nails and crude knives, using their limited forging capabilities.

Once again, please revise the story with the skill changes.

Revise these and I will see if there is anything else. You're making good progress.