Hello Slizzered!
Hutch have important matters to handle IRL, I'll be looking after your application meanwhile. So lets get started.
I like your application and the character you wish to play, Barnabus seems like he can be a nice addition to our setting. The things I'd like you to address aren't that massive as you've managed well with portraying personality and relation to the lore, both which most struggle with.
His childhood and younger years, those may require a few more lines. Examples of what to mention are what he was like as child, how his parents affected him or why they did not since they died, what became of him after they died? Etc. This point is strongly linked to us needing a little bit more written out about how he achieved his skills in
Blacksmithing, lumbering and climbing. Why would we need this? Well, without it we can't judge if a competent or apprentice skill in either is justified. Furthermore, it's likely to help some of the character's story and personality to know more about where these skills come from.
Hitting things. While amusing I'm afraid it wouldn't be a skill itself. I think you wish to either remove this or build upon it. For example, is he meant to have any weapon skill? In that case, what weapon? When/how did he get any training with said weapon? To otherwise just hit things with his fist we'd not count as skill simply because that's very basic and barely novice skill in hand-to-hand combat/martial arts.
The format. You've not entirely used our whitelist format, but I'll tell you what little needs changed. We need your IGN at the top and we'd like you to list what notable items he arrives to the Forbidden Lands with at the bottom (currently you have them listed under appearance).
Alright, that's it! Fix these points up and we'll see if I can whitelist you for the test afterwards. Good luck! And again, we apologize for the delay.
Hutch have important matters to handle IRL, I'll be looking after your application meanwhile. So lets get started.
I like your application and the character you wish to play, Barnabus seems like he can be a nice addition to our setting. The things I'd like you to address aren't that massive as you've managed well with portraying personality and relation to the lore, both which most struggle with.
His childhood and younger years, those may require a few more lines. Examples of what to mention are what he was like as child, how his parents affected him or why they did not since they died, what became of him after they died? Etc. This point is strongly linked to us needing a little bit more written out about how he achieved his skills in
Blacksmithing, lumbering and climbing. Why would we need this? Well, without it we can't judge if a competent or apprentice skill in either is justified. Furthermore, it's likely to help some of the character's story and personality to know more about where these skills come from.
Hitting things. While amusing I'm afraid it wouldn't be a skill itself. I think you wish to either remove this or build upon it. For example, is he meant to have any weapon skill? In that case, what weapon? When/how did he get any training with said weapon? To otherwise just hit things with his fist we'd not count as skill simply because that's very basic and barely novice skill in hand-to-hand combat/martial arts.
The format. You've not entirely used our whitelist format, but I'll tell you what little needs changed. We need your IGN at the top and we'd like you to list what notable items he arrives to the Forbidden Lands with at the bottom (currently you have them listed under appearance).
Alright, that's it! Fix these points up and we'll see if I can whitelist you for the test afterwards. Good luck! And again, we apologize for the delay.