[Hutchy]

[dir=ltr]Hello, Tetris. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

• Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over her life, particularly through her teens. The backstory needs to show more description of how she was as a child, how she was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this. In addition, we ask that a paragraph describing the character’s personality be added to help us judge it’s realism.
  

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• Your character’s skills need to be worked on, and it’s current layout makes it difficult to understand the ‘level’ of her skills. I recommend that you read this guide and evaluate the layout of this section.
  

 

• Your character’s backstory is lacking in explanation of how she grew up. We need to see how her childhood was, what she experienced through adolescence. In short, it needs to be a biography of the character which shows that you know the character, understand the lore, and it must justify all of the character’s personality traits and skills. in summary, we need a more detailed backstory. If you’re having trouble understanding or writing this, the Character Sheets forum is a good place to start. 
  

 [dir=ltr]That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.

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