[Hutchy]

I'm in GMT, but I'm nocturnal, sleep durind the day and work late-afternoons and evenings so... yeah.

ANYWAY! Next round.

• "A while after her 10th birthday, the war had died down" Earlier you mention that they keep themselves secluded from other people, if that's the case how did they learn this. Another question would be where they're getting food and such from. Do they grow/catch it themselves?
  

 

• "She Began asking questions, and when they were left unanswered' So did her parents not know the answers to these questions or did they choose not to tell her? Seems like an odd thing to do after letting out of the house for the first time. 
  

 

• This is a good start, but I still need to see justification for her skills and personality through the story. For instance, there's no sort of training or practice in deception or disguises, and philosophy isn't really something the average person could teach. As with the lore and personality, this will help us to judge the quality of the character and if it'll fit in the setting.
  

 

• Further on skills, there are too many for a character this age. To start, I'd lower or remove the skills Deception and disguises, both that she's had no formal training in these, and to reach that level she'd have needed to practice these for 10-14 years. Further, unless there's a good reason for it, I'd remove Philosophy. That said, if you make edits to thesebear in mind the requirements for skill levels, which are also explained in the skill guide. 
  

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.