[Hutchy]

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• ‘In his teenage years’ There’s not a lot of mention of Sabir before now. Since this is a backstory, you should ideally focus on him rather than joining him quite late on. The backstory should explain what he, specifically, was like as a child, then into adolescence, then adulthood.
  

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• Finally, the backstory needs to conclude with the character’s arrival in the Forbidden Lands.
  

That's all I caught this time round. Bump the thread when you're done, and we'll continue.
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