[Hutchy]

Sorry for the wait again, Kyrenic.

Alright, waht you have now is much better, however there are still some changes I need you to make. 

Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this to the setting. knowing the character's age. I can safely say that he is old enough to include mention of the Dusk Portal re-opening in the backstory. In general, you may wish to look at past, approved applications to get an idea of waht we're looking for in an application.

This point needs acting on to make your app acceptable. Since your character is 22, they would have been alive for the events of the Dusk Portal starting to open. I'll need you to incorporate this and later events into your backstory where it's appropriate.

You mentioned that you want to build and RP finding a cabin, I'm afraid this isn't a possibility we cater to. The town we all spawn in has plenty of room and you must start there as it is where almost all of our RP takes place. There is nothing to stop you from building a cabin later, but for the start, I'm afraid not. Additionally, the backstory must end with their arrival, anything after that is RP you'll be able to do with others here.

That's all I have for now. Bump the thread again when you've made your cahnges and we'll continue.