23-02-2017, 06:17 PM
Hello, 2kliks. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.
First, I need you to relate your character's backstory to the server's lore, found here. Particularly the later years, as it seems you already made a connection at the beginning.
A few things about his leg. I want to see a descfription of how he survived being dismembered like that, it's no small thing after all. Also, a few things to note: Walking with a peg leg takes some time to get used to, so for a good while after getting his feet back he'd be stumbling around, likely needing a crutch. Also, the peg leg itself, there's not really such a thing as 'springy' steel, far as the kind of setting we have is concerned, so I'd recommend that you change this to be your regular, standard peg leg. The shape's fine, just the material.
Next, archery. While he might havge the years necessary years, expert skills are generally reserved for those with 20+ years of almost daily practice and training. I recommend that you lower this to something closer to competant, looking at the 7 years of time he seems to be in the army.
That's all I have for you for now. Please post again in this thread when you've made your edits and we'll continue.
First, I need you to relate your character's backstory to the server's lore, found here. Particularly the later years, as it seems you already made a connection at the beginning.
A few things about his leg. I want to see a descfription of how he survived being dismembered like that, it's no small thing after all. Also, a few things to note: Walking with a peg leg takes some time to get used to, so for a good while after getting his feet back he'd be stumbling around, likely needing a crutch. Also, the peg leg itself, there's not really such a thing as 'springy' steel, far as the kind of setting we have is concerned, so I'd recommend that you change this to be your regular, standard peg leg. The shape's fine, just the material.
Next, archery. While he might havge the years necessary years, expert skills are generally reserved for those with 20+ years of almost daily practice and training. I recommend that you lower this to something closer to competant, looking at the 7 years of time he seems to be in the army.
That's all I have for you for now. Please post again in this thread when you've made your edits and we'll continue.