[ignition]

Hey Ignition, thank you for applying to the server! I’ll be grading your application.
 
1.     Grammar. Although Mesalia uses Minecraft as a backdrop, our RP is mostly text based. Thus, we require you to show some grammar proficiency in your application and RP. You don’t have to be a professional linguist, but basic things like capitalization, punctuation and sentence structure should be present.

2.     Race. Please list what race your character is. The story seems to imply that he’s Lucin. For reference, new players cannot play Xitians or Lucins. Only those approved by staff can have access to those races. As a new applicant, you can play a Mesalian. If your character is a Mesalian, well, they can’t use powers.

3.     Backstory. The character story should give more detail on to who James is. You don’t have to detail every year, but it feels like there’s quite a bit missing. Try to explore the character and explain what they were like as a child. Did they have any friends? How did they act around others? How was this changed by lore events? When James grew older, how close was he to his new mentor? What was it like being in the knights? What did he do in the timeframe between ages 20 to 37?

4.     Lore Events. Your backstory implies James’s parents fighting in the War of Veld, but there’s not too much lore discussed outside out that. Just so you’re aware, the current year is 49 AV. So, 49 years after the War of Veld. Meaning if your character was 13 when his parents were killed, that would make him roughly around his 60s in current setting. Getting further into lore bits, there is no mention of the Purge, the Mesalian Civil Wars, the reopening of the Dusk Portal, or the dragons. 
 
Thank you for applying! Please revise the application as I see fit and we can continue. 

edited