05-11-2017, 02:53 PM
Hello, Cays. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.
Alright, first things first, I need to see more relation to the servers lore, which can be found here. Being 20, he'll have been born shortly before the Civil War ended. Make sure to make mention of these and following events in your character's backstory. Speaking of backstory, it needs to end with either your character arriving in or travelling to where the setting takes place. For ease of reference, it's a town called Nightveil.
Also, I'm not really sold on the idea that your character willingly got onto a boat going out to sea with a total stranger. Could we please get an explanation as to why he goes through with it? Otherwise, this will have to be changed.
That's all I can think of for you right now. Please post again in this thread when you've made your changes and we'll continue from there.
Alright, first things first, I need to see more relation to the servers lore, which can be found here. Being 20, he'll have been born shortly before the Civil War ended. Make sure to make mention of these and following events in your character's backstory. Speaking of backstory, it needs to end with either your character arriving in or travelling to where the setting takes place. For ease of reference, it's a town called Nightveil.
Also, I'm not really sold on the idea that your character willingly got onto a boat going out to sea with a total stranger. Could we please get an explanation as to why he goes through with it? Otherwise, this will have to be changed.
That's all I can think of for you right now. Please post again in this thread when you've made your changes and we'll continue from there.