[SentaiPink]

Hello again! Great work! Lets see here

• First thing is first, I owe you an apology, I was wrong in the following:
  

  “For Umbriae—Umbriae—Umbriae!!” roared throughout the mind of poor Helena as she slept.
  
  “For Umbriae!”

  You were correct, please excuse me for that. I should know better then to review apps while working my FT job! x3 What you have now isn't inaccurate, so changing it back is up to you.
  
  
  

• ... through a stroke of luck, B'tone found a man with a small sailboat who was doing it for free.

  This sort of breaks my suspension of disbelief. The trip takes a very long time, and it's a considerable demand on resources to travel it, so just perhaps the reason the captain wouldn't charge him or even a trade for safe passage or something.
  
  
  
• You corrected the gold mask to bronze which I suppose works though I don't know how a metal strap would attach or how it would cover the lower portion of his face and him still breath. Also;
  

  Do your character bring anything to the setting (part from clothes)?
  Just his golden mask

  forgot to update that.[/list:u]
  
  
  And that's it! I really had to look just to find these so you're doing great. We should have you ready in no time.