[MelancholyFae]

Currently:
I've edited the age to match better our current timeline.
I've edited one of her skills - to clarify something she would have had, but I had forgotten to explain.
I've edited Jos out of the story at the end, as Delfi will be bringing her in on his character.

I need to edit her personality, as per Michelle's request. I'm currently not sure how to, and usually I'm a bit vague only because I need to play them a bit before things are concrete (it's been known to me that my chars don't always end up how I wanted them to, personality wise - they can get more bold, or more carefree, or more angry, etc.. so because it's easier for me to figure them out when I play them for a few times first.. but I shall try to explain her personality a bit more since it's needed.)

[Michelle]

Right, so going back to where we left off…

1. The skill changes are fine; competent horse riding and wagon-driving would not be difficult to achieve. However, I’ve noticed you haven’t included any skill that includes animal breeding. Was this intentional? I understand that animal breeding doesn’t quite involve a skill, but in some parts of your application you imply Heidi will be doing selective breeding (i.e. influencing a genepool of an animal so it has specific traits). Selective breeding would most likely require some knowledge that should be noted in your character’s skills. If this point is applicable, please revise.
2. As you know, points 1 a, b, and c from my last post still apply. Point 1a seems quite straightforward to me, as it’s a matter of considering why Heidi is that way. But to address your concerns: I suggest you try roleplaying her with someone in Skype, or writing a few passages as her. It might help you get a better feel for the character.

That’s all. If you have any more questions or concerns, let me know.

[MelancholyFae]

I've been adding bits and pieces for the last three days, to explain more her personality. I felt the need to not actually edit the personality traits (I apologize, as this is what you were aiming for initially, I think), but I did explain them, I believe, much better within the story itself. The traits were supposed to have been listed only as a summary (I realize now that since I'd done them first, I ended up never actually writing her personality within the story, as I had been trying to keep it short), so now I hope the story stands on its own with the 'list' as supplementary.

Quote-boxes are the edited, added sections, to give her more depth during parts of her life, explaining her personality, as well as some interactions with her parents, Delfi, and the rest of the clan.

I also added the animal breeding into her skills.

[Michelle]

Skills are all clear, however… I find that the additions to the backstory do not meet the requirements of my points and general expectations. You describe Heidi’s personality a lot in her backstory, but you don’t really add anything new in terms of information, other than her diligence.

1. What I would like to see (as stated previously in point 1a two posts ago) would be some justification for this personality. You tell us she doesn’t want to play with other children, and you tell us she started being eccentric, but you don’t show us how she became like that.
2. On top of that, I still am pushing for a personality description in prose. This isn’t a comment on your writing ability; I’ve never seen anyone communicate enough personality in backstory alone for a pass. This is why point 1b from two posts ago stated ‘please provide a prose description’, and why the application format revision has a personality section.

That's all for now. Good luck.

[MelancholyFae]

I have updated the personality into prose form. I believe it covers what I had placed earlier as her personality, along with a bit more information.
The 'mild compulsion' is a mild form of OCD. It is not always logical in how it develops, nor is it always logical in its symptoms, causes or reactions. Her version is not strong enough to take over most of her life, though she can have episodes that are stronger, based on how stressed the event makes her.
Due to it being a mild form, as well as starting from early childhood, and the illogical-ness of its causes, the habits developed slowly and were largely unnoticed as just odd daily activities.
I hope this helps explain what I was trying to portray in her personality; not as a full-fledged OCD based on phobias of dirt, danger, or strangers, but something more manageable and possibly more interesting roleplay-wise in a social setting.