[Airwalk26]

[Airwalk26]

Waiting..

[Michelle]

Hiya, Airwalk. I'm Michelle. Pink's become busy, and I've become less busy, so I'm taking over your application. Right, so I believe you've sorted everything Pinkie mentioned in her last post. However, I have one final feedback point of my own...

Personality-wise, your character feels unaffected directly by the loss of his family. Generally I can see some links between the personality you've given him, and the later years of his life, but they're vague links that I'm not sure are intentional. So we need you to flesh out the impact of Airwalk's loss just a little more in his backstory; how did he feel about it? How did it change him?
Note that the personality you have there makes sense already. This is just about connecting the loss of your character's family to that personality. (But if you do feel like you need to change anything with personality, feel free.)

That's all. If you have any questions, feel free to ask. Otherwise, good luck.

[Airwalk26]

Ok thanks. I'll start working on it immediately.

[Airwalk26]

Edited !!!