[Michelle]

Hi, Tig. Someone else will be reviewing your recent revisions (i.e. the sword stuff), but I’ll be responsible for all-else. This includes the following minor points:

1. “Run-of-the-Mill Tactics, especially those pertaining to defense” This needs a rank indication in the style of the skill guide. Please revise.
2. “Basic Trading and Business, for selling steel.“ As a blacksmith, why would he need to sell steel? Or is steel supposed to be an informal term for the things he makes? Please elaborate/clarify.

That’s all from me. Good luck.

[Tigady]

Thank you, Michelle. I did mean his wares in general, clarified.

Also added a level to his tactical knowledge.

[Michelle]

1. Good, but now you have one advanced and three competents (according to the skill guide), which is considered too much for a twenty-nine year old. Your character’s language abilities are being counted because he wasn’t raised bilingual, or was taught Lucin from a young age. Thus, the act of learning the language is conscious and actually takes effort to pick up. Please revise.
2. Furthermore, competent tactics isn’t sufficiently justified by your character's backstory. Remember that competent means that the character could do the skill for a living; defending a town during a siege for months wouldn’t involve that many tactics, defensive or otherwise. Please revise; I recommend moving the skill down to novice level.

[Tigady]

I moved both down to basic. Can we meet halfway there, or is that a negative-no-bueno?

[Michelle]

No bueno is the consensus from Zark. Please move tactics down to novice.