[powerhouse16]

In Game Name(IGN):
mikesargent2014

Why do you want to join?
I want to join because i have been wanting to role-play in minecraft for a very long time. I saw this community and decided that I wanted to give it a try.

Do you have any RP'ing experience?
I have rp'd in GTA 4 on the Xbox 360, also on Red Dead Redemption.
Tell us a bit about yourself:
I volunteer for my local fire department and in my school. I am also the star runner for the Varsity track team at my school.

Your Character Biography:
larus (character name) was born during the imprisonment of the Mesalians by the Xitian. He was pushed into mining, and way from his dream of becoming a farmer. After learning all the mining and excavating skills that his father, Maelyss, taught him they ran off trying to bring him with them, but he couldn't. for he was stricken with fear and convinced himself it would be better to stay.Both of his parents gave there life to help the late stages of the rebellion.

Specify your character's skills:
Farming, blacksmithing, guarding

Do your character bring anything to the setting (part from clothes)?
my own diamond pick axe, diamond sword, iron hoe, and a tone of materials.
Anything you'd like to add:
None

[TinyTim77]

Hey, this is Tim and I will be given you feed back on your application today so you can have a better go once it is trashed as another staff member has Private Messaged you about. Unfortunately, there's quite aways to go with this application before we can get it on the road. Here's the major issues I've spotted:

1. More Lore relation. Please take the time to re-read our lore if possible, and include some of the main parts of it in your character's backstory, such as the Civil Wars and Purge.

2. The backstory needs much, much, more detail. We would like to see a backstory that incorporates the lore as well as furthers your character's personality. Take a look at some of these accepted apps for examples of what I mean (This is on our old forum, so please disregard everything else).

3. You need to show your character's personality in his backstory. In this example, I saw very little reference to what your character thought about the things in his life, or anything at all really. Again, you should look at some of the applications the above link which will help you see what exactly I mean by saying this.

4. You need to explain in the backstory how your character obtained the skills in which you stated he has; namely; Farming, blacksmithing, and guarding, as well as exactly how decent he is at these jobs and what sort of experience has got him there.

5. Quoted from the whitelist application format instructions:

"Bringing in too much or non-acceptable items: You may be asked to remove items if there's too much or not acceptable ones with your character. No one starts off having everything sorted!"

This means IG items such as diamond swords, diamond picks, and a 'ton of materials' is absolutely unacceptable. This also suggests that you may have the mentality that this is an RPG server rather than an RP server. The difference between the two being that in a general RPG server one tries to gather as many supplies as they can on their own, but in an RP server the focus is not on hoarding as many supplies as possible but more so working together in roleplay to help the community ICly and realistically do what needs to be done.

6. Need your character's age, in relation to the lore.

7. At the moment, those are the main things that could help you with a new application once this one is trashed. If you make a new application, I strongly recommend you take awhile to look over the whitelist application format, Lore, and the accepted applications on the old forum.

Thanks and good luck,

-Tim