[Hutchy]

Alright, Kiro, I'll be handling your application.

• First, I need to ask that you include a little more relation to the lore. Some indication if his hometown’s and/or family’s experience of the Purge would be a good place to start.

• ‘Kane attempted to settle into life in his home but he found there wasn’t anywhere he quite fit in’ It was earlier mentioned that his home town had a guard. Why did he not join them?

• ‘his style of fighting would be suited to using a cloak in his off hand’ You’ll have to explain this one, as I’m not hugely sure how a length of fabric will help in a fight. Also, how is he holding it if he is already holding a shield and sword?
  The skill to go with this will also have to be explained in the same way. Until you mentioned it was for combat I was convinced that you meant camouflage or some such thing.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.