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Felix Sutor
#6
Alright French you’re close. Now for the next round.

Firstly, this may just be an issue with the wording:
‘...His parents loved him dearly, and often spoiled the little boy with whatever his heart would desire...’
‘...Throughout Felix's childhood, his family could never provide much...’

This is contradictory and a little confusing. An explanation or edit of the wording would solve both this problem. Please review this.

Secondly, while it is not necessary for the application’s acceptance, I would recommend that you change the format of the skills section to use the accepted scales in the skill guide.
#7
Updated changed wording to make more sense and changed skills
#8
Alright French, with that edit I can accept this application.

Well done.
  


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