16-08-2013, 12:20 PM
My points still apply and if I've pointed out something unclear it's cause it need revision to be made more clear.
As an example:
If battles did take place where they lived, please add that to the story as it doesn't state so clearly at the moment.
Etcetera. Good luck!
As an example:
If battles did take place where they lived, please add that to the story as it doesn't state so clearly at the moment.
Etcetera. Good luck!