26-10-2013, 08:27 PM
Hi Spy! You know this song and dance. So, let's begin!
1.
Even though she's young there isn't a lot of personality to her. Don't be afraid to add depth, flaws, and challenges to the character! Just because she's 10 doesn't mean she's not a fully developed person, who's rapidly developing into a pre-teen and an adult. What's written in her personality section isn't reflected in her backstory.
2.
The backstory reads like a list of RP events. You need more input into Estelle's feelings on what happens, what the aftermath of the events with her parents were, just more information on who Estelle is as a person, and how she gets along with her family and friends. I just feel like there is a lot missing and I have no idea who this character is.
Just let me know if you have questions.
1.
Even though she's young there isn't a lot of personality to her. Don't be afraid to add depth, flaws, and challenges to the character! Just because she's 10 doesn't mean she's not a fully developed person, who's rapidly developing into a pre-teen and an adult. What's written in her personality section isn't reflected in her backstory.
2.
The backstory reads like a list of RP events. You need more input into Estelle's feelings on what happens, what the aftermath of the events with her parents were, just more information on who Estelle is as a person, and how she gets along with her family and friends. I just feel like there is a lot missing and I have no idea who this character is.
Just let me know if you have questions.