29-10-2013, 07:10 PM
Hey spy, ok this is what I am running into, I had the same problem with Lapis. If you look at this application without any knowledge of the setting you have no idea who this is or who any of the names dropped in the application mean. Try to write her application as if this isn't a setting everyone is already acquainted with.
The other remaining issue is that she has no character flaws which gives the idea there isn't much to her character. Try to expand on her personality flaws, they have to be there somewhere, you even mentioned a shyness in the backstory that isn't listed, so try and work on that, I can't really give anymore help in that regard.
The other remaining issue is that she has no character flaws which gives the idea there isn't much to her character. Try to expand on her personality flaws, they have to be there somewhere, you even mentioned a shyness in the backstory that isn't listed, so try and work on that, I can't really give anymore help in that regard.