12-02-2014, 02:38 AM
Round two. Most of your revisions are good; just a few points of clarification left.
1. “This kind of ties into point A, I'm worried that Malcom doesn't have enough skills, but I'm having trouble of thinking of any skills that would make sense with the story and be worth mentioning. I could use some feedback on this part, if you don't mind.” Something that involves the tavern work in his early life might make sense, but you could also consider some form of labour he did during prison. You might also want to view this list; there’s a bunch of needed trades along the bottom.
2. Vaguely related to the last point: most of the mobs in Minecraft do exist in Mesalia (called dusk spawn), meaning it is common for people to have some form of combat skill, even if it’s very basic. We will accept a character with no combat skill, but do note this fact.
3. That being said, “apprentice -1” is confusing. Novice sits under apprentice, so why “apprentice -1”? Please clarify/revise.
4. “I want him to desire revenge and learn some combat, and use his deck of cards to pass the time and earn enough of a living from gambling. I want to develop his personality and make relationships, not make the other players hate him because he steals all of their money.” The concern isn’t really about other players or characters; it’s about the current setting for the RP, which is a small town with no currency at the moment. Things are shared between all, rather than paid for. So while a gambling con-man is acceptable, you can’t OOCly expect it to work as a living. So long as you know this and are prepared for it, we’re good to go.
That’s all for now. Good luck.
1. “This kind of ties into point A, I'm worried that Malcom doesn't have enough skills, but I'm having trouble of thinking of any skills that would make sense with the story and be worth mentioning. I could use some feedback on this part, if you don't mind.” Something that involves the tavern work in his early life might make sense, but you could also consider some form of labour he did during prison. You might also want to view this list; there’s a bunch of needed trades along the bottom.
2. Vaguely related to the last point: most of the mobs in Minecraft do exist in Mesalia (called dusk spawn), meaning it is common for people to have some form of combat skill, even if it’s very basic. We will accept a character with no combat skill, but do note this fact.
3. That being said, “apprentice -1” is confusing. Novice sits under apprentice, so why “apprentice -1”? Please clarify/revise.
4. “I want him to desire revenge and learn some combat, and use his deck of cards to pass the time and earn enough of a living from gambling. I want to develop his personality and make relationships, not make the other players hate him because he steals all of their money.” The concern isn’t really about other players or characters; it’s about the current setting for the RP, which is a small town with no currency at the moment. Things are shared between all, rather than paid for. So while a gambling con-man is acceptable, you can’t OOCly expect it to work as a living. So long as you know this and are prepared for it, we’re good to go.
That’s all for now. Good luck.
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