Alright, Rand, round two.
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- Points one and four of my previous feedback still apply here, there's still not much indication of how and why your character is the man he is when it comes to personality, and the back story doesn't end with his arrival in the Forbidden Lands. Please work on this.
- His family members, specifically his wife and child, are nameless. Please name them, his parents too if you wish.
- On lore relation, can you please explain why the Civil War didn’t have a huge impact on him and those around him? Also, you need to touch on the Dusk Portal reopening, how did this affect him?
- Finally, I would suggest that you bring down one of your advanced skills, two advanced skills and two competent skills is too much for a 37 year old. Please revise this.
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