[Hutchy]

Alright, Heikmar, round two.

• ‘My character is Bounty hunter’ My previous point about this kind of character still applies. Making this their dominant profession in the setting will quickly become boring, if not virtually unplayable from the get go. Assassins, bounty hunters, bandits and thieves of any kind will have this problem.
  It is acceptable if they were such in the past, but in setting they will be difficult to play and not get boring.
  If you need help deciding what you want your character to do or be, you can find a list of needed professions here.

• Overall, your backstory lacks the detail necessary for us to judge if the character is realistic and would fit into the setting. You can see an example of what we look for in terms of detail in this application here.
  ‘When hank was 15‘ As an example, 15 years has gone by with no description of between events. The backstory needs to be a fully detailed record of your character’s life leading up to their arrival in the RP setting.

• ‘his grandfather started writing and talking about mystic forces and all the weird stuff’ I can only assume you’re speaking of things like magic, which simply do not exist in this setting. Please revise this.

• ‘Hank desperately tried to fix the portal every night.’ While there are portals in the world, no one knows the first thing about portals; how they work, why some are ‘turned off’ and so on. Besides the Nether and Celestial Realm portals, only one has previously been found inoperable, meaning they are inconceivably rare.
  Additionally, this portal in the story has appeared out of nowhere, as my first point, you must add more detail to this otherwise vague backstory. This needs to be revised.

• ‘Hank doesn't really know about his father.’ You may want to reevaluate the order of this backstory as it seems to be in a bit of a non-sensical state, as this sort of part of the backstory is generally closer to the start, for example. Please evaluate this.

• ‘In The Age Of Rebirth’ The names of the ages are OOC, as in no one in the setting refers to them as such. Please revise.

• ‘The Melians’ As point one, who are they, what did they do, where did they come from? Especially, why, if they are so secretive, did Hank tell Ellen about them and make them immediately disband? We need more details.
  ‘Hank had a girlfriend, named Ellen’ When did Ellen come into his life? How long have they been together? Has it been an easygoing relationship? Please add more detail.
  ‘Now some of the old members of The Melians took Ellen and now Hank is trying to revenge them and Xitans at the same time.’ Why did they take her, when did they take her, what was Hank doing at the time?

• ‘One night Hank stole a horse, and left to Forbidden Lands.’ The Forbidden Lands is across a body of water from Main Continent, where most of the characters’ backstorys start. This boat journey can take months depending on where they start. Please revise.

• ‘On the way to Forbidden Lands, Hank met a stranger that told him a secret: Ellen is somewhere in Forbidden lands.’ While it’s acceptable that Hank doesn’t know this person, we need to know for the sake of judging if this character’s realistic. Please elaborate.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.