Hey Zed! Round 2!
Some lore stuff
About here. While there is tension, it is not as if large hordes of Xitians returned into the Mainland. However there is a lot focused on that area and it does strain some worry into people. Maybe it's just the wording, but I do not want you under the impression that another war broke out. Currently, there is peace in the overall mainland. (Not to say that folks wouldn't have individual problems Lucas couldn't help with)
Skills The skills may need some tweaking. I would prefer them to be more listed with their descriptions.
Ex:
Hunting, Competent - Description of Skill
About the age of eight is when a character should start leaning said skills as before that, well, he or she is learning to become a person and adapt to the world.
Also, note that learning more than one skill takes time from another. This is to keep some balance in play. So I do not think a skill should be progressed as far as "nearly advanced" unless Lucas knows some special knowledge that allows him to do his job better than your average professional.
Thanks again, please revise.
Some lore stuff
Quote:During their missions into the outskirts of society, Lucas and his parents would then be met with a burst of information: the Xitians were making their way back into the Middle Realm, and the world was becoming tense with war once again.
About here. While there is tension, it is not as if large hordes of Xitians returned into the Mainland. However there is a lot focused on that area and it does strain some worry into people. Maybe it's just the wording, but I do not want you under the impression that another war broke out. Currently, there is peace in the overall mainland. (Not to say that folks wouldn't have individual problems Lucas couldn't help with)
Skills The skills may need some tweaking. I would prefer them to be more listed with their descriptions.
Ex:
Hunting, Competent - Description of Skill
About the age of eight is when a character should start leaning said skills as before that, well, he or she is learning to become a person and adapt to the world.
Also, note that learning more than one skill takes time from another. This is to keep some balance in play. So I do not think a skill should be progressed as far as "nearly advanced" unless Lucas knows some special knowledge that allows him to do his job better than your average professional.
Thanks again, please revise.