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[Approved] Application - zed0155
#1
In Game Name (IGN): zed0155


How did you find us? (Forums, friend, previous member, etc…):

A member by the name of "FireDog" linked me to the website on Reddit(the subreddit /r/mcservers).

About You:

Hi there! I'm zed0155 and I have always been a fan of both Minecraft and roleplaying. I have been playing Minecraft since beta 1.8, and I don't plan on stopping for a long time. I have had a lot of experience in roleplaying as well, as I have roleplayed in a game known as Warcraft 3: The Frozen Throne for several years. I have also played on a handful of other Minecraft roleplay servers in the past. Overall, I have put a lot of time into both Minecraft and roleplaying, and I am eager to try and find a place in the Middle Realm.

CHARACTER INFORMATION

Name: Lucas Malar (NOTICE: ANY instance of the name "Rexxan" is supposed to be "Lucas." Sorry for forgetting to change the name if you find an instance of Rexxan.)

Age: When Lucas first enters the story of Mesalia, he will be 22.

Gender: Male

Appearance: Lucas is a broad, bulky figure. He has brown eyes, black hair, and his skin is tanned and rather dirty.

The skin I will be using is currently being updated.

Personality: Lucas is a very calm and easy-going person. As he is rather self-conscious about his looks when around strangers, he typically acts very friendly and quiet. When Lucas is faced with danger, he puts the safety of others in front of his own well-being. If the situation gets hostile, he typically becomes very hostile-looking himself, and tries to use his figure to take charge of the situation. When alone, Lucas is very silent and patient, taking his time to take in his surroundings and think about his every move. Overall, Lucas is a gentle giant who cares for the well being of his friends, and does anything in his power to protect the innocent from harm.

Backstory:

The story of Lucas starts with the history of his parents. His father, Andrew Malar, grew up in slavery to the Xitians. Supported and raised by peasants during the War of Veld, Andrew managed to survive and be liberated from the grasp of the Xitians. At 16 years old, shortly after the three years of The Purge, Andrew would go to join a huge group of Mesalians known as The Aegis. This huge group acted as a force of righteousness, protecting innocent and peaceful Mesalians from the more war-like groups that would form on the mainland. During his time in The Aegis, Andrew learned how to be a strong fighter, living only to protect the peace of the Middle Realm.

When civil wars between Mesalians just began to spread from the work of Xitians, Andrew Malar began to fear the lands he walked. The Aegis itself began to crumble into its own civil war, and Andrew felt he could no longer serve the situation on the mainland. Andrew Malar would escape to the colonies in the Forbidden lands, seeking a much more peaceful society that was easier to control.

Andrew Malar would steal away to a small port city in the Forbidden lands, and work in a militia force in order to sustain himself. It would take only two months for him to meet the love of his life, and Lucas's mother: Emily Shore. Unlike Andrew's pursuit to be a warrior and protect the life of the innocent, Emily sought to understand the Science of Things, and has spent most of her life seeking the knowledge of how the world works. As the two Mesalians quickly fell in love, Emily would begin to notice the impact of the civil wars quickly taking a large toll on the peace in the city. Emily warned Andrew that it would become as bad here as it is on the mainland, and they both agreed on a life-changing action: they would flee into the forests and survive as loners.

Emily's intelligence and Andrew's strength combined to allow them to become competent survivors of the hardships of the wild. The two learned how to find their own food and water, and survive against the dangers of the night. It wouldn't be long before Emily would become pregnant with Lucas, and Lucas would make his way into the history of the Mesalia.

Lucas would enter a very simplistic lifestyle. Due to needing no social skills or have any safe way to "play" or do other childish things, Lucas would be taught to sustain himself from a very young age. He became devoted to learning how to hunt, fish, and find other vital resources from his parents, and become happy with his life as a man in the wilds. He also began to feel deeply attached to his parents, feeling he needed to support them more than they supported him as Andrew and Emily began to grow older. Overall, his childhood was spent solely on learning about the ways of surviving in the forests of the forbidden lands, and slowly form a deep passion in helping others survive as well.

When the grasp of civil war began to lose power on the world, Lucas's parents decided they would attempt to reconnect themselves with the world. Lucas and his parents would find all sorts of people in need of supplies and help. Despite Lucas lacked the ability to properly communicate with strangers, he became obsessed with the idea of helping others with his intelligence of the wilds.

During their missions into the outskirts of society, Lucas and his parents would then be met with a burst of information: the Xitians were making their way back into the Middle Realm, and the world was becoming tense once again. Fearing the worst case scenario, Lucas's parents wished to return to the wilds and live the rest of their life away from every ounce of combat. Lucas himself wanted to become a part of society, and try and be a guardian against the potential conflicts to arise from the Xitians. His parents refused to join their son, but also didn't stop him from doing what he wanted to do. Lucas would depart from his parents, and take a HUGE leap in his quest to become a helping member of society: he sailed to the mainland.

On the mainland, Lucas would wander the wilds, occasionally finding requests from villagers to fulfill. Slowly and barely improving his social skills, he began to find happiness in what he was doing for the world. He was using his knowledge from the years of being in the wilds to help the needy, and was enjoying every second of it.

After he had spent some time on the mainland, Lucas would decide to return to the Forbidden Lands and continue to intensify his attempts to become a part of a society. He would find a boat and sail to a town known as Alroc. At age 22, Lucas would be approaching another society and perhaps take his most daring attempts at making a name and place for himself in a society. He would use the strength and intelligence he has acquired during the course of his life to serve, overcome, and most importantly: survive.


Capabilities:

3/4ths of Lucas's life has been devoid of social interactions, relaxation, and or side hobbies. Lucas has spent most of his life learning and practicing the arts of living in the wilds. His time spent in the forests of the Forbidden Lands and the mainland have given him a variety of skills.

Hunting, Competent - Hunting was and has been the center of Lucas's life. He has spent countless days stalking the unknown wilds for beasts to add to his food stock. Lucas has also had many devoted studies on how animals react to his actions in order to make sure he doesn't over-hunt a herd of animals. He has started his practice in hunting at 6 years old, as his father would begin to bring Lucas on hunting missions.

Survival, Competent - Lucas's survival skills in mild, forest-like environments are very solid. As he has spent most of his life surviving in these forest areas, he has a good grasp on what he's doing. Lucas would also certainly do a lot better than the average person if he is forced to face climates he is not used to(in this case, cold/hot climates).

Melee Combat, Competent - As Lucas learned the arts of survival and hunting, his father also decided to take his knowledge of melee combat from being in The Aegis and give it to Lucas. Lucas has learned how to make moves and counter moves when in combat, and can certainly put up some sort of a fight. While he probably wouldn't do so well against a more devoted soldier, Lucas still knows a thing or two and will take advantage of that.

Fishing, Novice - Lucas has spent some time on the art of basic fishing as well. He is able to find a river or lake and manage to snag at least one or two fish after some time. While he probably couldn't rely on fishing to keep him well fed or use it as a job, it is still an option for Lucas.

-HERBALISM AND RANGED COMBAT HAVE BEEN COMPLETELY REMOVED.


Characters with more skills tend to sacrifice the more basic foundations to of their life, like general social skills, family or even personal well being. In Lucas's case, he has been almost completely devoid of any real experience in social interactions. Lucas only had interactions with his parents for more than half of his life! Lucas is overall lacking in social skills, but this very aspect about him has allowed him to become so strong in many different tactics of survival in the wilderness.


Items:

Lucas, coming from being a well-equipped survivor of the wilds, would be coming into society with the means to eat, drink, and defend himself.

He would have a small amount of food with him, preferably fish and meat. He would also have a water bottle.

He would also have a knife.



Additional Comments:

Lucas is VERY VERY VERY loosely inspired by a World of Warcraft character known as Rexxar. There are barely any similarities, other than the fact that both Lucas and Rexxar are "hunters."
#2
Hey Zed, My name is FireDog, and I will be grading your application.

You already know me from the Reddit thread, and I apologize for the wait. Our whitelisters are a bit busy as of late so I will be taking the responsibility of grading your character.

Skin! First thing I want to address is the skin you are using. My only complaint as of now is that it doesn't look too humanoid. I understand you are using a skin based off a World of Warcraft character, but I would prefer if the skin was a bit more friendly to our lore and had more human traits. Primarily the skin color, which almost appears Orc-Like to me.

World of Warcraft Character? Speaking of the WoW similarities...While there is no inherent flaw with it, I believe that staff feels it would be best for your own, more original base concept. That doesn't mean you can't base your character off of the WoW character, but perhaps simple things such as changing the name, personality, and other aspects to make the character more of your own work is best.

Story Beginnings Your character story seems to start at the age of 16 for Rexxar. I need you to begin the story at his childhood, and explain that to me. It does not have to be too much, but having details of what he did or what he thought of things as a child are good ones. Simple things like child-hood friends or thoughts on his father's line of work are nice.

The ending of the story
Quote:With an incredible lack of social skills, he will find his way into the cities and towns of the Forbidden lands, and perhaps venture to the mainland itself. He will live to serve, protect, and most importantly: survive.
Here you state that he will be going to the Mainland. All of our role play in Mesalia takes place in the Forbidden Lands. The character story must end with taking a boat to the location we role play in, the town of Alroc. Please revise.

Skills! I need you to follow a more traditional skills format. Skills in our sense are more so based on job capabilities rather anything else. Please see the Skill Guide to get a grasp at what we are looking for. Also, be sure to take a look at other approved applicants skill sets.

Starting Items! I would remove just a tad. The knife is okay but maybe a bit less food to encourage you to do some hunting RP or interactive RP with the townsfolk for food.

This is all I have for now. Please revise these. Thanks for applying!
#3
(31-08-2014, 08:50 PM)FireDog Wrote: Hey Zed, My name is FireDog, and I will be grading your application...

Thank you for your feedback! I have taken everything you have said into account and have edited my application accordingly. Here is a summary of what I have changed:

Skin - As I had stated, I am currently working towards making it have a lot more quality and look a lot more human-like. This includes the skin's skin color.

WoW Character - I have changed my character's name to Lucas. I never took anything from Rexxar's personality; I was solely inspired by the fact he is a hunter of sorts.

Story Beginnings - I have gone into much more depth about the beginning of Rexxan's(now Lucas's) life. There are no specific events to be stated, but it explains what happened in Lucas's childhood and how his personality progressed.

The Ending - The story now ends specifically on going to Alroc via boat.

Skills - I have rewritten the capabilities section to follow more closely to what is stated in the skill's guide.

Starting Items - I have reduced my starting items as requested.
#4
Hey Zed! Round 2!


Some lore stuff
Quote:During their missions into the outskirts of society, Lucas and his parents would then be met with a burst of information: the Xitians were making their way back into the Middle Realm, and the world was becoming tense with war once again.

About here. While there is tension, it is not as if large hordes of Xitians returned into the Mainland. However there is a lot focused on that area and it does strain some worry into people. Maybe it's just the wording, but I do not want you under the impression that another war broke out. Currently, there is peace in the overall mainland. (Not to say that folks wouldn't have individual problems Lucas couldn't help with)

Skills The skills may need some tweaking. I would prefer them to be more listed with their descriptions.
Ex:
Hunting, Competent - Description of Skill

About the age of eight is when a character should start leaning said skills as before that, well, he or she is learning to become a person and adapt to the world.

Also, note that learning more than one skill takes time from another. This is to keep some balance in play. So I do not think a skill should be progressed as far as "nearly advanced" unless Lucas knows some special knowledge that allows him to do his job better than your average professional.

Thanks again, please revise.
#5
(01-09-2014, 08:02 PM)FireDog Wrote: Hey Zed! Round 2!

Some lore stuff - I have reworded this part of the story to make it less dramatic. Lucas and his parents simply took the information of the Xitian's portal sparking as a sign that conflict will arise in the soon future. They could have been wrong, but the family was still in fear. This lead to the separation of Lucas from his family, as well as the beginning of Lucas's massive push towards becoming a part of society.

Skills - I have rewritten my entire capabilities section following the format you had given me.

Please keep this in mind:

Lucas's situation has given him both massive advantages and massive disadvantages. His father was taught how to fight and how to overall be strong and fit, while his mother was taught a vast amount of knowledge of the world. At the same time, Lucas and his family were completely disconnected from society, and barely spent any time on side hobbies or social commitments. Lucas began his training in the arts of the wild as early as six years old, and basically spent every day practicing and advancing upon his survival skills. All of these aspects about Lucas's life also lead to Lucas's weakness in social interaction. I feel all of this this justifies the fact that Lucas is quite strong in the fields of hunting, survival, and combat, yet also very weak on social interactions.

NINJA EDIT!: I reworded the section in which I explain what Lucas's mother has done with her life. I have put the changed sentence in bold.
  


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