06-09-2016, 06:41 PM
Hello, Niceguy. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.
Alright, first things first, I need to see more relation to the servers lore, which can be found here. Being 19, he'll have been born shortly before the Civil War ended. Make sure to make mention of these and following events in your character's backstory.
Speaking of backstory, it needs to end with either your character arriving in or travelling to where the setting takes place. For ease of reference, it's a town called Nightveil.
Skills-wise, I'm not sure where he's getting advanced swordsmanship from. What age was he allowed to use a sword from, because he needs at least 14 years of study to have an advanced skill. The backstory doesn't really back that up.
Finally, for items, rather than explain as I do, I'll throw a quote from application format thread your way:
'This is a listing of items your character arrives in the setting with. The list should be fairly short, only a few essentials if anything at all. Limiting what you have to start encourages RP later when your character is in the setting and looking for more of what they need or want.'
Sorry this took a little longer than we'd like. Please bump this thread when you're done making your edits and we'll continue from there.
Alright, first things first, I need to see more relation to the servers lore, which can be found here. Being 19, he'll have been born shortly before the Civil War ended. Make sure to make mention of these and following events in your character's backstory.
Speaking of backstory, it needs to end with either your character arriving in or travelling to where the setting takes place. For ease of reference, it's a town called Nightveil.
Skills-wise, I'm not sure where he's getting advanced swordsmanship from. What age was he allowed to use a sword from, because he needs at least 14 years of study to have an advanced skill. The backstory doesn't really back that up.
Finally, for items, rather than explain as I do, I'll throw a quote from application format thread your way:
'This is a listing of items your character arrives in the setting with. The list should be fairly short, only a few essentials if anything at all. Limiting what you have to start encourages RP later when your character is in the setting and looking for more of what they need or want.'
Sorry this took a little longer than we'd like. Please bump this thread when you're done making your edits and we'll continue from there.