08-09-2016, 07:27 PM
Alright, Guy, next round.
Backstory-wise, I'll need to know how he survived/escaped the razing of his village as it's something of a major event. That in mind, I also want to see you describe how this event, and later ones, helped him become the character he is.
Also, his final mission. If this is such a huge event in his life, we need details. What happened, how did it go, did anything happen to him, etc.
I noticed in his personality that you mentioned he could be mining. Without the necessary skill, he's not going to be doing a whole lot of that without injury or, worst case but very real scenario, of an early death. Unless you plan to add this as a skill, as well as the evidence in his backstory, I would remove this.
Finally, for items, this character's going to be moving into a town with goods and services readily available to him. In addition to spending months at sea to get there, it's very unlikely he'd have 15 edible pork chops to carry around, and 20 torches would likely be taking up too much valuable room. Bear in mind this and what I said earlier about a short list with just a few essentials.
As for the pick though, if you want, I recommend that rather than another sword wielding character, you might think about instead having a war pick for some variety and uniqueness to your character.
Earlier you had armour listed. This would be fine, but a light suit of perhaps chain or leather with some thin steel plates might work better over full steel plate. He's a mercenary afterall, and full steel plate armours are prohibitively expensive.
And with that, I give you the next round. Bump the thread when you're done, and we'll see where we go from there.
Backstory-wise, I'll need to know how he survived/escaped the razing of his village as it's something of a major event. That in mind, I also want to see you describe how this event, and later ones, helped him become the character he is.
Also, his final mission. If this is such a huge event in his life, we need details. What happened, how did it go, did anything happen to him, etc.
I noticed in his personality that you mentioned he could be mining. Without the necessary skill, he's not going to be doing a whole lot of that without injury or, worst case but very real scenario, of an early death. Unless you plan to add this as a skill, as well as the evidence in his backstory, I would remove this.
Finally, for items, this character's going to be moving into a town with goods and services readily available to him. In addition to spending months at sea to get there, it's very unlikely he'd have 15 edible pork chops to carry around, and 20 torches would likely be taking up too much valuable room. Bear in mind this and what I said earlier about a short list with just a few essentials.
As for the pick though, if you want, I recommend that rather than another sword wielding character, you might think about instead having a war pick for some variety and uniqueness to your character.
Earlier you had armour listed. This would be fine, but a light suit of perhaps chain or leather with some thin steel plates might work better over full steel plate. He's a mercenary afterall, and full steel plate armours are prohibitively expensive.
And with that, I give you the next round. Bump the thread when you're done, and we'll see where we go from there.