[Hutchy]

Sorry for the wait, Niceguy, but I'm here for your next round.

I'm afraid those stories told about him are going to have to change. A lot.

a true vision of their homeland.

Long story short, no one is entirely sure what the Nether Realm looks like because it's entirely undocumented. 

Fire and lava was everything

If this is true then the heat of the area would simply be too intense for him, perhaps even some of the Xitians, to enter. Also, neither race are capable of terraforming such a large area, even in groups.

with an arrow sunk into his shoulder he was reminded. Adrenaline rushed through his veins

No amount of adrenaline is going to stop the pain response. The shoulder is one of the worst places to get shot since it's home to several nerve bundles, not to mention his collar bone and shoulder. If he's lucky, he's in crippling pain, if not he's just permanently lost the use of his arm and is bleeding out.

 as tens of Xitian archers and swordsman revealed themselves

 he did kill his opponents with a various array of twists and spins to allow fatal cuts and throwing knives to sail from his hands

'Tens' implying anything from 20 to 90 of them. Even if it were 10, he's not going to get past them alive. There's just too many, he's only 19 and inexperienced and right now we have to assume there's still some environmental advantage heavily in favour of the Xitians.

Most of the wounds took weeks to heal back up

the few lucky shots with arrows and daggers weakened him for months

Even if he were able to walk away from this, his wounds are described as being so significant that he's likely to have suffered massive internal bleeding, shattered bones, muscle torn to shreds, severing of nerves, organs damaged into uselessness to name a few. I don't care how tough someone is, getting 'dotted with arrows' of any variety is not something that heals over a few weeks and doesn't leave you crippled; and trust me, it most certainly won't have been 'a few lucky shots' that hit him.


Sorry for the long one, but seeing as this carries more weight now after your last edit, it needs to be done realistically. Personally, I;d recommend either writing a more achievable goal, or more simply writing around it. Right now I just can't accept this as is.

I'll leave it there for this round. Bump the thread when you've made your edits and we'll keep going.