12-12-2017, 04:29 PM
Sorry for the wait, Jack, but here's your feedback. I'll give you it as a quick bullet list, since there's a lot of little things rather than a few large things to be resolved.
- A full blooded Xitian needs a skill rating for Nether use.
- Using powers needs a lot of concentration, fighting while using powers is extremely difficult.
- Currently you have too many skills. I would recommend removing Rune Engineering, Cartography or linguistics.
- Old Mesalian's more dead than Latin and is taught extremely rarely. Least ways by a guy in a circus.
- The amount of clothes... you need to lose some, that's a bit too much.
- Given the number of Fire attuned Xitians we've had recently, I have to ask that you reconsider. This isn't necessary, but it'd be nice to have some variety.
- 4 years of acrobatics training would equal Apprentice level.
- We'll need some information on how she came to learn Ko'Ban and Twin Rivers languages. The former is not written and almost entirely verbal and the latter's users are incredibly secluded.