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[Approved] Jamie
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Name: Jamie Samantha Elliot
Age: 26
Gender: Female
Race: Xitian
Religion: Confused / On the Fence
Eyes: Red
Hair: Brown / Curly
Height: 5’7 / 170cm
Weight: 140lbs / 63kgs
Marks: 
Harpy Eagle Emblem branded on chest, left side, below collarbone.
Lineart tattoo covering majority of right thigh depicts a stylized tiger battling a serpent.

Personality:
Jamie is a rather rash and spontaneous person. She thinks of herself first, and while capable of planning and patience she vastly prefers to do things as they occur to her. She is known to harbor a level of resentment towards the lucin race, but it hasn’t reached a level of all out hatred. More along the line of casual and subtle racism. She can often prove very energetic and friendly, but doesn’t tend to get very deep with people. She has a free spirit and is very independently motivated, but enjoys having others around for entertainment and utility.

Description:
She stands at about an average height and is notably slender, she’s athletic and her muscles are well toned, but she’s still rather skinny. She mostly deals with her own body weight rather than heavy loads. She has a very youthful appearance about her, and due to her body type can often be mistaken for someone a decade younger. Her figure is petite to an extent and she’s the type that could squeeze through a child sized hole if she needed to, but she carries herself with the confidence of a heavyweight champion. Her hair is curly and kept medium length so she doesn’t burn it, and her skin is slightly tanned. She has a harpy eagle branded onto her chest just below the left collarbone, and a stylized black-and-white tattoo covering the majority of her right thigh depicting a tiger engaged in fierce battle with a serpent.

Languages:
Common - Fluent
She understands the language well.
Xitian - Conversational
She grew up speaking xitian, but hasn’t had the chance to really engage in the language since she was young.
Lucin - Translatable
She understands enough to translate the language given time. She can speed the process using her translation book on the language.
KoBan - Barely Viable
She knows the basic grammar and a couple of simple phrases, but would need a new book in order to translate it fully.

Powers:
Fire - Normal Use
This is her naturally attuned element, she’s been using it from a young age and it is her one above average skill. However, she lacks a good teacher and as such struggles to advance past the normal level.
Earth - Easy Use
She has trained with this element rigorously, however it does not come totally natural to her at all and is better used as a utility, not reliable in combat.
Nether - Barely Usable
She has no training whatsoever with this element, so far her attempts to use it all end in spectacular failure - typically with collateral damage.

Skills:
Acrobatics - Competent
She is athletically spry and skilled at maneuvering on the fly, naturally good at climbing, clearing obstacles, and running. She can be very light footed and move silently as needed. She has a basic ability to use this in performance for flips, tight ropes, and other basic stunts. She learned most of what she knows as a ranger, but honed the skill to an art in the circus.
Survivalism - Competent
She knows the basics of living off of the land and surviving harsh mountain and jungle terrain, she isn’t particularly skilled and hardly a woodsman, but she can keep herself alive in a wilderness situation for an extended but not indefinite period of time.
Hand to Hand - Apprentice
She isn’t great with striking blows or special techniques, but she’s gained a basic capacity to dodge, evade, redirect, and grapple with opponents. She roughly integrates this with her fire use as a last resort, but can only manage novice fire use while engaging in hand to hand due to the concentration it requires.
Cartography - Apprentice
She can map out terrain or structural features usably, but don’t expect anything fancy.
Linguistics - Apprentice
She’s studied a few languages and older root words to gain an ability to decipher and translate languages to a limited extent. When she runs into roadblocks on a translation, she can usually solve them with the right book or help. This helps her learn new languages faster.

Equipment:
Leather Rucksack
Steel Kukri
Waterskin
Spyglass
Cartography Equipment
Language Book: Old Mesalian
Language Book: Lucin
Rope: 20 Meters
Silver Earings x2
Silver Tiara
Silver Anklets x6
Tiger Tooth Necklace

Clothes:
Rain Cloak - Loose / Green Patterned Foilage
Silk Circus Garb - Loose / Red w/ Silver Beads
Leather Jacket - Loose Rugged / Brown
Burlap Trousers - Relaxed Fit / Khaki
Cotton Buttoned Shirt - Fitted / White x2
Leather Running Boots - Fitted / Brown
Boot Socks / Grey x3 Pairs
Undergarments / Bottom - Fitted / Black x4
Undergarments / Top  - Fitted / Black x4
Leather Gear Belt / Brown

Backstory:
Jamie Samantha Elliot was born in a xitian mountain camp in the year twenty-three after the veld, to an old trouble making veteran of a father and a mother who spent most of her years working in the iron mine. Her parents were both thoroughly noble blooded, and traced their lineage to skilled leaders of the conquest of the middle realm. Her father spent his early years fighting to hold the lines at the Dusk Gate in the final days of the war, her mother spent her childhood moving stone and iron for the war effort. None of that mattered two decades after the great defeat. None of it. 

Jamie’s mother moved on, and let love into her heart. No one expected her to finally bear a child at almost forty seasons of age, but with this blessing she was able to find peace. Jamie’s father however had never known peace. He was born in war, he was raised in war, and he was scared by war. Not even a daughter to raise could stop him from his constant plotting and wilful contribution to the misunderstandings of the civil wars.

He kept on fighting - encouraged by the recent spark of the dusk gate that he took as an omen of the return of xitian supremacy - until the day came in the year twenty-nine after the veld that a lucin by the name of Captain Henry Cliffon finally tracked him home, and put an end to him and every other military aged male in the village. A final solution that came far too late for the jungle city of Kal-Moro, which was decimated by their neighbors in the nearby mountain kingdom of Havenhold due to lethal misunderstandings - the work of Jamie’s father and his associates. She was six seasons old.

Jamie’s mother was bitter.. But she knew the day would come when her husband’s stubbornness would be the end of him, and she thanked gods of all religions that her daughter was spared from the collateral. But now the hidden village was weak, smaller, and very alone. Life was hard for a time, until the day came that the civil wars ended and an uneasy peace settled on the entire region. In the year thirty-three after the veld Jamie’s mother took her ten year old daughter to the kingdom of Havenhold to seek refuge and a new life. The people were apprehensive, but she brought many gifts of iron and silver from her mining years to persuade them.

Thus Jamie grew up in the great stone city, the realm of heroes and conquerors where stories of adventure and battle are sung in every corner. She was inspired and grew ambitious and unruly, often causing trouble for her aging mother, who dreamed of a place where they could both along, and be safe. Then the time came that the dusk gate opened. The city guard was called up and put on alert for that entire year, and the xitians living there were kept closely monitored. Young Jamie thought this was an adventure she was destined for, but her mother had grown too frail to make such a journey.

A twelve year old could never cross a continent on her own, and neither could an elder with decades of mining brittling her back. So Jamie made a promise to her mother, that if they couldn’t go to the place that they belonged.. She would make this place their home, she would make the people of the city accept them, and give her mother the comfortable and easy life she deserved. Jamie worked hard even in her youth, but given the circumstances of the city she could never stay out of trouble or hold an apprenticeship. She was a misfit.

So she ended up where all the other wayward and misguided young people go to make their mark and earn their keep. The city guard. When she was fourteen she joined up with the garrison chapter of the guard as a recruit, cleaning equipment and running errands between training and exercise. Her mother taught her lessons on the elements every day when she came home, but her mother was best at moving earth. Jamie took after her father and attuned towards fire, an element her mother was barely competent with.

Nonetheless, Jamie trained hard in the guard, she trained diligently with her mother, and by the time she was in her sixteenth season and old enough to leave the garrison chapter behind to test for a fighting chapter she was able to pass the survival test required to join the rangers and receive their brand, permanently burnt onto her chest. The Havenhold Guard Rangers were a skilled bunch of rowdy misfits who prefered expedition and adventure to walking a patrol or manning the wall. Their responsibility was to scout the mountains for threats and once a season raid the ruins of Kal-Moro to suppress packs of vengeance seeking resistance fighters.

They taught Jamie how to survive in the mountains and jungle, they taught her how to traverse cliffs and climb trees. She learned how to set small animal snares to sustain herself far from home, pitch a tent, create a smokeless cooking fire, draw a basic map, and survey an area or subject without detection. She returned home whenever she could to continue her lessons with her mother, but met with frequent roadblocks in the advancement of her power and could never exceed basic competency with her attuned element.

Jamie served with with the rangers for six years, becoming a rather skilled scout and a somewhat respected guardsman. She had explored many of the old ruins of Kal-Moro and profited from her finds, and exploring these lost places became her favorite part of being a ranger. She searched the jungle and mountains for ancient sites, learning what she could and taking what she could carry, but without the knowledge to understand the sites nothing she found was ever considered particularly valuable.

Shortly after Jamie’s twenty second birthday her mother’s health began to deteriorate. She took leave to stay with her in the end, and her mother passed peacefully of natural causes at the age of sixty one seasons. Jamie grieved, and spent her savings to bury her in a place of honor in the city. Then she left.

With her mother gone, Jamie no longer felt tied to Havenhold. The place no longer seemed like a grand adventure without the end purpose being to provide for her last family and keep her safe. So she searched for a chance to make a new life travelling and learning, to find her true adventure. She spent what little she had left on old dusty tomes and sought out scholars to learn the languages of the world, learning the fundamentals, root words, and grammar necessary to build on her understanding and the history still known to the world while hoping to find a way to profit off of adventures to come, and then she found her chance one day in conversation at a tavern when she met a man from a passing circus. He had traveled many lands and learned to speak many languages, and promised that within the circus were all manner of skilled people from all manner of places.

Jamie joined up as an acrobat and immediately started taking lessons in language from the speaker, history from the elders of each town they passed through, and tried her best to learn to talk with the horse riding KoBan performers though only ever learning some basic grammar and phrases from these strange people the circus had picked up in far off travels. All of this between her acrobatic practice days and firedancing shows. She tried many times to get a lesson from the fireworks master, but he absolutely refused to educate her in explosives beyond the basic principles of how to avoid setting off the ones in storage.

Eventually the time came when she felt that she had learned enough from the circus. It was time to go out again and adventure, explore even more of the world.. And find the lost treasures and profits that she could. She joined up with a merchant vessel and worked her way across numerous ports of the forbidden lands, before coming across an ancient city rumored to be cursed. Her excitement could barely be contained amidst such adventure-sounding rumors, so she gathered her things and left the ship at Nightveil. Not knowing how the town would receive a xitian - let alone someone seeking to profiteer from their history - She stashed her ranger equipment up a tree and headed into town as merely a performer.

Timeline:
Born - Age 0 / 23AV
Father killed / Gate Spark - Age 6 / 29AV
Civil War End / Settled in Havenhold - Age 10 / 33AV
Dusk Gate Opened / Promise Made - Age 12 / 35AV
Joined Guard - Age 14 / 37AV
Joined Rangers - Age 16 / 39AV
Mother Died / Left Rangers / Joined Circus - Age 22 / 45AV
Left Mainlands / Found Nightveil - Age 26 / 49AV
#2
It's a work in progress, but I am open to input from anyone. Been working on the concept for a while but when I got down to writing it down I ran into a creative rutt and it just didn't feel like it was at the quality I wanted it. So please, if you have input.. Help me out, lemme know what you think, and I'll hammer this shit out.
#3
BAM! UPDATED, READY FOR REVIEW!
#4
Sorry for the wait, Jack, but here's your feedback. I'll give you it as a quick bullet list, since there's a lot of little things rather than a few large things to be resolved.
  • A full blooded Xitian needs a skill rating for Nether use.
  • Using powers needs a lot of concentration, fighting while using powers is extremely difficult.
  • Currently you have too many skills. I would recommend removing Rune Engineering, Cartography or linguistics.
  • Old Mesalian's more dead than Latin and is taught extremely rarely. Least ways by a guy in a circus.
  • The amount of clothes... you need to lose some, that's a bit too much.
  • Given the number of Fire attuned Xitians we've had recently, I have to ask that you reconsider. This isn't necessary, but it'd be nice to have some variety.
  • 4 years of acrobatics training would equal Apprentice level.
  • We'll need some information on how she came to learn Ko'Ban and Twin Rivers languages. The former is not written and almost entirely verbal and the latter's users are incredibly secluded.
That's everything for now. Bump this thread when you've made your edits and we'll continue from there.
#5
Thanks Hutch! Here's what I got. The changes are highlighted in red, and I've provided a handy changelog!

Changelog:
-Added a sentence to the acrobatic skill to explain it's placement.
-Removed the Rune Engineering skill.
-Added a nerf / modifier to her integration of fire use and hand-to-hand.
-Took some clothes off the list, lowered quantities. Blabla. Now she has two outfits, a spare shirt for one, a cloak, extra socks and extra underwear.
-Added detail on her learning of history and old mesalian.
-Removed mention of rune engineering from backstory.
-Added more detail on the people of the circus to explain certain languages! The circus is meant to involve as many accepted lore cultures as possible, and I'd like to flesh it out in it's own lore proposal later with mentions of Provencian music, Northern Beastmasters, and a few other lore spots as well. Let me know if that's not acceptable.

Lastly, I did some thinking on your suggestion for her power attunement, and while I understand what you mean, I focused her on fire because we have more skilled fire focused xitians present. I'm hoping her quest to learn more about it will lead to a wellspring of good RP!

Thanks for your help, let me know if there's more I can do.
  


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