[Good_Old_Epsilon]

Alright, I'm done, I addressed everything you said in your post.

- Reduced his skill levels and got rid of one, while pointing out where he learned them and how.
- Changed his backstory to avoid all of that Ambassador nonsense.
- Changed his fears and gave reason to them.
- Rephrased a few things and TRIED MY BEST to keep to a Past Tense.
- Changed his interests a little.
- Removed a Long Term Objective.
- Gave his Personality a reason and more of a description.
- Gave the Monastery a name.

Hopefully this should be enough.

If you find any more strange tense switching, point it out, and I will change it. Otherwise, I don't know what else to change here.

I blame my Nationality for this, I sometimes wished I was born English.

Then again food sucks major ass over here.