04-11-2017, 07:49 AM
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Hutchy
Lord-Oberleutnant Hutchenstein I, Protector of the Realm, Hater of Juvenile-Technicolour-Horses
Lord-Oberleutnant Hutchenstein I, Protector of the Realm, Hater of Juvenile-Technicolour-Horses
04-11-2017, 05:16 PM
Hello, Sank. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.
My only real criticism of this is the layout of your skills section. We have a set standard described in our skill guide here. Bear in mind his age and how long he's been using these farming and cooking skills when you give them a grade.
That's all I have for you right now. Post again in thias thread when you've made your cahnges and we can continue from there.
My only real criticism of this is the layout of your skills section. We have a set standard described in our skill guide here. Bear in mind his age and how long he's been using these farming and cooking skills when you give them a grade.
That's all I have for you right now. Post again in thias thread when you've made your cahnges and we can continue from there.
SankareaUL
Yeetimus Dabilous
Yeetimus Dabilous
04-11-2017, 06:24 PM
(04-11-2017, 05:16 PM)Hutchy Wrote: Hello, Sank. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.Edited. Also, minuscule change in backstory at ages 11-14.
My only real criticism of this is the layout of your skills section. We have a set standard described in our skill guide here. Bear in mind his age and how long he's been using these farming and cooking skills when you give them a grade.
That's all I have for you right now. Post again in thias thread when you've made your cahnges and we can continue from there.
Hutchy
Lord-Oberleutnant Hutchenstein I, Protector of the Realm, Hater of Juvenile-Technicolour-Horses
Lord-Oberleutnant Hutchenstein I, Protector of the Realm, Hater of Juvenile-Technicolour-Horses
05-11-2017, 11:58 AM
Alright, Sank, next round.
Just one point here too, there appears to be no justification in your backstory for the hunting skill. Please either add a reason why he would have this skill, or remove it.
That's all for now. Post again in this thread when you've made your changes and we can continue from there.
Just one point here too, there appears to be no justification in your backstory for the hunting skill. Please either add a reason why he would have this skill, or remove it.
That's all for now. Post again in this thread when you've made your changes and we can continue from there.
SankareaUL
Yeetimus Dabilous
Yeetimus Dabilous
05-11-2017, 12:52 PM
(05-11-2017, 11:58 AM)Hutchy Wrote: Alright, Sank, next round.
Just one point here too, there appears to be no justification in your backstory for the hunting skill. Please either add a reason why he would have this skill, or remove it.
That's all for now. Post again in this thread when you've made your changes and we can continue from there.
Edited. That's what the edit from age 11-14 was that I said before. I added a bit more detail to it this time.