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Demotheus Drahven
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I made a couple small (but still very important) edits in the application.

First one is that he is perceptive. I realized that he would have gained a higher sort of "sense" of people and his surroundings since he became a merchant, so to cater and "advertise" specific things based off of the things he notices in some people's mannerisms, clothing, etc.

The second one is really a consistency error. It's in the background story itself where he hid in the barrel to escape the commotion and hopefully not get caught by the thugs. Originally I had implied (rather poorly) that he disassociated himself from the situation, but I realized that wasn't likely good enough.

Sorry for the inconvenience in case anyone was in the process of reviewing this.
#3
I'm posting to address staff's primary concern regarding this application, which is the mental illness aspect. You describe a "disassociative disorder" that doesn't correspond well with any real-life condition, for there is a spectrum of different dissociative (note the spelling) disorders. Ultimately the final product seems to resemble a Gollum/Smeagol archetype, but there simply isn't a real condition that matches this familiar but inaccurate image of mental illness.

Rather, you combine aspects of PTSD (withdrawing due to trauma, anxiety, and flashbacks), dissociative identity disorder (multiple personalities that are not really exhibited together simultaneously, as in your backstory), and schizophrenia (hearing voices, holding various delusions, and not being able to communicate coherently) while not really showing sufficient knowledge of any one of these individually.

Mental illness is a sensitive subject and thus it's very important to staff that it is represented accurately and realistically in RP, which is what makes such characters so difficult. I know from my own personal experience across various servers that far more often than not mental illness is simply used to justify unpredictability and other poor RP habits, and we wish to avoid that happening on our server.

Thus, given your past portrayal of mental illnesses and the inadequate and vague description that you provide here, staff has come to the collective decision that we cannot permit you to have a mentally ill character at this time. In light of this these aspects will have to be removed if you wish for this submission to be accepted. Thank you and good luck. I believe another staffer will be handling our other concerns with this application.
#4
That is false. I've done a pretty decent amount of research about the disorders. Maybe I was being vague, but that doesn't mean I don't know what I'm talking about. I would rather have a conversation with staff about this because rewriting this character (which is what I'd have to do) would be more taxing and counter productive to what I wanted to RP as.

First of all, he does not have multiple personalities. I stated that it could develop into such a disorder under the right (or wrong, depending on how you look at it) circumstances. Disassociative disorder and Schizophrenia are very similar (and are often times confused with each other).

Perhaps a little biased, but a lot of thought has gone into this character and I can play it, contrary to what the staff thinks.
#5
"I've done a pretty decent amount of research about the disorders. Maybe I was being vague, but that doesn't mean I don't know what I'm talking about."
We did not state that you had not researched the mental conditions mentioned in this submission, nor did we state that you do not understand them. We stated that the representation of these mental conditions in your character submission was inaccurate, thus unrealistic and thus, not sufficient evidence to suggest you are able to RP this condition correctly. This, combined with your previous portrayals of mental conditions, have led staff to collectively conclude that you are simply not ready for a character with a mental condition at this present time.

"First of all, he does not have multiple personalities. I stated that it could develop into such a disorder under the right (or wrong, depending on how you look at it) circumstances. "
Firstly, the staff are aware your character does not have dissociative identity disorder. However, some parts of your character's backstory imply that your character does: "He blinks and mutters, "Don't tell him" then looks to the side quickly as if in answering himself, "Shut up!" he says in a hushed voice." As Mcman's post stated, this is inaccurate as dissociative identity disorder does not involve two personalities being exhibited simultaneously. Moreover, this argument is irrelevant as you can see from the points in Mcman's post, as well as the points given above and below this point:

"Disassociative disorder and Schizophrenia are very similar (and are often times confused with each other)."
Secondly, it's dissociative disorder. Not disassociative disorder.
Thirdly, schizophrenia and dissociative identity disorder are not similar. They're merely confused with one another. Regardless of any research you may have done, you are not demonstrating this knowledge effectively enough for staff to conclude you are ready for a character with a mental condition. This, in conjunction with considerations for the community's RP standards, is why you have been told by staff to revise your application.

"Perhaps a little biased, but a lot of thought has gone into this character and I can play it, contrary to what the staff thinks."
The staff have not seen the depth in your previous characters or in your portrayal of mental illness which conveys to us that you are ready for this responsibility. Your RP skills need to show substantial improvement before the staff are willing to approve another character with a mental condition from you.

When you have revised your application, I will then review it more thoroughly. To do so now after you have already received significant feedback is not fair to other applicants. That's all, for now. Good luck.
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