[Emzz2]

In Game Name: Emzz12

Why do you want to join?: I've been looking for a serious roleplay server with a nice community. This server seems great.


Do you have any RP'ing experience?: Yes, I played on several minecraft roleplay servers before.

Tell us a bit about yourself: I'm Emma and I'm from The Netherlands. I like to draw, play games and to roleplay.

Your Character Biography:
Lunet was born 15 years after Veld, during the Civil War. Her parents wanted to travel around the world, their reasons weren't clear to her because she was only 7 back then. Their parents refused to take Lunet with them. She would only be a burden, they said. They hadn't thought about a place for Lunet to live once they would leave, causing her parents to be involved in a major argument with Lunet's uncle, who eventually took her in himself. Lunet has always said that she was proud of her parents, as exploring the world would be an amazing thing to do. She wasn't only lying to others, but also to herself.
Lunet was very fond of her uncle. He was the only person she could be completely honest with and who understood her, too. It was the same way around.
After the wars were stopped, Lunet's uncle never believed that they would ever be actual peace. Lunet agreed, but she was just relieved that the wars were at least over for now and that peace and safety had struck, even if it was temporary.
However, safety didn't struck. It was lightening that did, making her and her uncle's home burn to the ground, taking her uncle with it. Lunet survived, with as only visible wounds some burnwounds.

(Right now, Lunet is about 5'4", 21 years old and has burnwounds on her arms and legs. Most of them are covered up by her clothing.)

Specify your character's skills:
Lunet is a skilled archer. After her uncle had passed away, she shot animals to either eat herself or to sell to other people in exchange for money.
Lunet is very good at making logical decisions.

Do your character bring anything to the setting (part from clothes)?
She will bring her bow and a journal.

Anything you'd like to add:
I like the lore, but I find it hard to remember it all. I did my best but I hope I will learn more about it while roleplaying.

[Hutchy]

Hello, Emzz. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

• Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. You have already made start on this, but there needs to be some more relation to the lore to help us see how and why this character fits into the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on her home, her family? Does her family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Also, pay special attention to the events leading up to and after the dusk portal opening, for such a young character.

• Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over her life. The backstory needs to show more description of how her was as a child, how her was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this. In addition, we ask that a paragraph describing the character’s personality be added to help us judge it’s realism.

• The backstory overall lacks the detail needed to properly judge this app, for example,
  ‘Her parents wanted to travel around the world, their reasons weren't clear to her’ While it’s alright that she didn’t understand their reasoning, we need to know these details to, again, judge the realism of the character and whether they are believable.

• Finally, your character’s backstory must end with their arrival in the Forbidden Lands.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.

[Hutchy]

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