[Michelle]

Welcome to Mesalia; as you most likely know, I'm Michelle. I'll be reviewing your application, and I will try my best to see this application accepted by Sunday for you. I would like to stress that any criticism of your work from me is not a personal attack on you. This process is to ensure you have a strong sense of a character who fits into the setting, and will provide fruitful, enjoyable RP for you and for the community.

1. It has been 27 years since the war of Veld. If your character is 23, he would not have been old enough to live through the war of Veld or the slavery. Please revise your character's backstory to suit this information.
2. Please provide a detailed description of your character's personality. Consider how the events in his life would have helped shape this personality.
3. "For 13 years, he stayed in those woods, undiscovered. One day, he was discovered by an adventuring Mesalian, who took him to one of the main cities, where his burn wounds, which still hadn't healed, could be treated." You are welcome to debate this, but thirteen years seems to be a very long time for burns to heal. Furthermore, how did these burns remain uninfected throughout this time?
3. Skill issues:

• a) The strong sense of hearing seems to have come out of nowhere. How did he not notice this before? Was he simply born with this, or was it somehow the result of something? Please elaborate on this.
  b) There are some parts in your character's backstory which imply your character has a few minor skills (such as hunting) outside the one field mentioned. Please ensure your skill set is exhaustive.
  c) With the minor skills in mind, I would still advise that you give your character another, more prominent skill. This is not only to ensure that he is balanced, but also to ensure he has a way to make a living should he have to. This point is completely optional, but recommended.[/list:u]
  
  That's all. Good luck.