[Shaishade]

Alright, I understand. I'll try to edit it as best as I can, but after that, you might have to trash it because I'll be leaving on Sunday. Thank you for taking the time to grade my app.

[Michelle]

Right, feedback is on its way.

[Shaishade]

Well, I'm pretty excited to see if I can get on this server. I'm definitely not gonna give up as easily as most. Whether it be one app, or five, I won't be going anywhere.

[Michelle]

1. Skill issues:

• a) Point 3a) on my last post still applies. Please try to justify and explain this more. Also, having a good sense of hearing makes sense for a hunter, but specifying a distance just isn't realistic. Its acceptable that he has an acute sense but the distance and application of such is largely situational. Apologies for not picking up on this earlier.
  b) "Hunting: He is still at a low level with it, but he can handle himself well with a bow and arrows."
  "He took the knife from a dead explorer he found, and lived off of field mice, squirrel, and the occasional dead rabbit." I believe that with the information provided, archery isn't justified as your character's choice of combat. Please revise this.[/list:u]
  2. Point two in my previous point still applies. "Cheerful" and "ordinary" unfortunately don't cut it. Consider the aspects of your character's life and try to induce facts about your character from what you've considered. What would have impacted them psychologically, etc? This can be brief, but it must be detailed. Here are some not-so-brief examples: 1, 2.
  
  I understand that the personality part can be the toughest part to a character, but it's arguably the most important. Thus, there is very little slack for me to cut you. That's all for now. Good luck.

[Shaishade]

You don't really have to cut me slack, I understand the requirements of an app. I will try my best to elaborate on the hearing thing. For the personality, I'll simply do a separate section under Character Bio, unless that wouldn't work.